Just one small thing and I'm depressed
I feel like no one cares
I feel like I'm being suppressed
And everyone it scares.
I feel like crying every tear I've made
And no one seems to see.
My heart is going through cascades
I can't believe I'm me.
The feeling this emotion gives me
The feeling that I'm weak.
This isn't what I'm supposed to be
I'm at my final peak.
Desperate to get away from myself,
Reaching for a final hand.
Right before I reach the shelf,
My dreams fall down like sand.
I don't know how to get away
From this awful, evil state.
It seems my choice is to stay
'Cause maybe this is fate.
Author notes
And, on top of all this I have the flu too.
"I have read the rules, understand, and agree to abide by them." Option #1
A contest entry
- Deltitnu - An instant must-enter... by Salig Flicka.
400 points, ended January 30, 2008, 7 entries
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Sometimes it is not that we are not seen or heard, it's just that we are too soft spoken and get run over by others. Sometimes you have to say "Hey...listen to me for once...right now, I need you" I liked this poem alot, you put alot of heart into it and I can feel the loneliness. Get out and get some fresh air and a little sunshine and take your mom with you. And then just let it all out of your heart
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Very strong
Electrifying write..ohhhh i hope u really are not depressed how could a talented one like you be like this? you're incredibly precious..this poem blows out black smoke...it is thick...filled with your impressive talent..good poem!
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It sounds a bit forced at the beginning, and overall I'm not exactly getting a feeling depression from this. Thank you for entering.
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Intense and powerful piece. Very well penned. Good luck with it in the contest
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Wow.
This is pretty a ha maze ing. I've been through this, and am going through it currently. It'll pass, as the others said. There is not much else i can say except for that i agree with everyone below me, I'm bookmarking this, and it was a beautifully written piece. Best of luck in the contest!
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I hate being depressed too. I'm sorry you feel this way? It's really sucky.
Hey maybe you can do something, like plan something to look forward to? That's what always keeps me going ya know.
Give yourself something to look forward to in life and stay busy be happy!
nice job by the way expressing your feelings. -
Pandy, where has your smile gone? Come on, neice, put a brave face on it- I'm here for you when I'm on and you've gotta push through life, dont ever let it defeat you. You're stronger than that!
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This is very sad, seems like when we're sick it only makes things worse
I truly hope you are feeling better new, isn't poetry a wonderful way to get these feelings out? Your rhyme is great too.
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Awwwww well it sounds like that you're really going through some hard times! Don't worry you'll be ok because I have faith in you
I hope that you get feeling better soon. I know it would suck having the flu
Kari
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get away somewhere by self and be silent. You will get wisdom on why and when.
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Sad
Good rhyming. I feel your pain. As the saying goes.. This too shall pass.
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I tend to agree with everyone else, very nicely written piece. I can truly understand these feelings. Depression and not necessarily knowing why or where it comes from. You don't understand it yourself, so there is no way to to make those around you understand. The only choices seem to be denial, or acceptance... niether of which are a good thing. I know how hard it is to see yourself in the middle of such emotion, but remember, you are in there somewhere... and somehow you will find your way back out. Putting it to paper is always a good start for myself. I hope it is the same for you.
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Very nicely written! The emotion put into this is great, and I can definitely relate. If your experience is at all like mine, the feeling will pass
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Really good piece. I loved the rhyming, very creative and unique. A lot of emotions within the lines. Keep up the good work.
HxS
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