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Shapeless

She's as innocent as a lamb
as broken as shattered glass
and the world's circumference
is not enough
to hold her in one piece.

The words are backwards
where they've bled through the page
And is it purely a matter of perspective,
which side to read?

Her head is between her fists
and her life is between her grip,
white-knuckled and aching, 'cause

when she knows more than she's willing to say
and thinks more than she's willing to let on
and the sky seems brighter when the sun is fading away
so she waits
and watches it's struggle.

There's more at stake, she realizes
than a simple day
more than hope, she knows,
to construct anew.

But the past is done, and the future
she hold with no regard, but the now...
she tries to scrap from memory.

To forget and be forgotten
and hold the peeling edges
of her heart in secret.

She's calloused, but she caused it
hiding behind her own hardened
veil of rough skin,
the shards of its original
are in fistfuls
in her hands

Her eyes are aching with
unshed tears-she thought the calluses
should have stopped
but this time
they couldn't.
She's trying to stop the words
trying to remove ink off
of the pages-to stare at blankness
for a moment

to have nothing but clear white before her.

But the tears-curse them and
their heat-can't remove
the stains that bleed far deeper than the surface
reveals.

And she knows more-oh please, dear God, no-
she knows more than she's
willing to think
and is more than she will ever reveal,
but for now
she's as innocent as a lamb.

Author notes

Written last year. Long story behind it. Title chosen by one of my friends.

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  • Gagiikwe
    February 9, 2008
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    Hi Stumbles, Just wanted to come back for a second read

  • Gagiikwe
    January 19, 2008

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    Good technically, and, effective imagery.
    Favorite lines:"when she knows more than she's willing to say
    and thinks more than she's willing to let on"
    And: "she knows more than she's
    willing to think
    and is more than she will ever reveal"

    Confronting ourselves is likely to do all that, for sure.


  • yael
    January 17, 2008

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    this is so good.
    i dont know how to express my feelings towards it.
    i guess its hurtful to see a child so...hurt.

    very well written.


  • Powered by Tofu
    January 12, 2008

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    wow, this is such a deep, emotional, raw poem. i love the feeling of innocence and confusion, and secretive-ness. really an amazing poem! i love it!


  • Nicada silver member
    January 5, 2008

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    I was struck by the raw emotion expressed here. You did a wonderful job on this one. I love it! Thank you for sharing it. Patty


  • Jeb
    January 5, 2008

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    Wow!

    I was really impressed by the depth in this piece! I mean damn! You did an excellent job writing this piece, the emotions flow quite nicely. Sad, descriptive, and seemingly very heartfelt. Overall I really liked this poem! Kudos to you!

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