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pondering

Missing image

a dreary comfort lies

in chilled dampness today

rain falling gently
like a soft blanket of amity
my mind silenced

as I sit and gaze
out the window

no-one is outside
the only movement
the barn
in the back
growing
wet and dark

beadlets of water

hanging

from the veranda ceiling
glistening
like a strand of pearls

 

 

peppered

between still frames
a squirrel scampers
down the tree
grabs a pecan
dashs back to shelter

I remember days
like this, in my old home

looking out back
beyond my daughter's swing set
at a barn
watching cats slink
in and out
slyly

imagining
that once inside
they'd loose all control

don't we all do this at times?

stay composed

hide something

reserve trust

until we feel

safe


even though

that home
was much older
more modest

 

I used to think
a piece of me

was left there

6 years later

I now know

a part of it
lives in me

Please tell me what you think

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  • melphleg gold member
    April 4

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    beautiful imagery, dear, just beautiful. It reads as nostalgic reminiscing. The first stanzas create a sense of piece triggering the reminiscing. That last stanzas are reflective of the deeper introspective ponderings.
    I could easily see this piece as the beginning of a good novel or story. The reader is immediately drawn in and is curious about the past behind the story and the truth.


  • billyd1012
    March 1
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    umm, this is really great. detailed and paced and exquisite flow, a steady meandering with your sweet and peaceful reward of serenity at 6 years. This stands alone from the rest of what I have read so far...keep doing this. (but the other, please don't stop!)

  • Awesome

    I really like the imagery that you used. and the lesson in here is quite clear with a true ending. Flawless.

  • Anguas-Confusion gold member
    January 28

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    sounds like many of my ponderings. such comfort within it. Thanks so much for giving me the opportunity to read it. it was a very inspiring read. keep up the good writes. much love xxx
  • Usagold
    January 28

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    sounds like peaceful pondering in the past. Now lets see one of fonder feelings of the future..lol..a good write...but remember past is for cherishing and learning..headup and forward on!

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  • Dr. Cube
    January 28

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    This was a very comforting poem to me. It just goes to show that the simplest of glances can take our minds back to childhood times, good or bad ones. Our minds are a mysterious mechanism at times. Great work!

  • High Flyer gold member
    January 7

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    Wow, the imagery in this poem is awesome! Just sitting comfortably, staring out a window can create so many beautiful thoughts and wonders. You captured this physically, emotionally, and spiritually. The relaxation of this particular piece was very heavenly. Great job poet!

    • michellemybelle gold member
      January 7
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      thank you for your comment! I am glad you liked this so well. Relaxation is good, sometimes I forget how much, but not on this day.
      blessings,
      Michelle

  • la dolce vita silver member
    January 7

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    what a wonderful and a emotional journey this was...smiling I dare say that I enjoyed reading this piece very much...

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    • michellemybelle gold member
      January 7
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      Thank you, I am glad you found the journey to be wonderful and made you smile! I appreciate your comment!
      blessings,
      Michelle

  • Jeg-er-Liv
    January 7
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    I really like this piece, and the picture was interesting as well. Good write, cheers!

    -Liv
  • Lovely poetry!

    This was created with such wonderful imagry!It was a joy to read-really!


  • UnchartedPoet
    January 6

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    Oh how we look back on our lives and then to think on what we will do with it the next day, week, month and year. What we will change and things we won't. This is a cycle of life and we will always follow this journeyed path laid out for us. Good read and thanks for sharing your work.

    Jen

  • EarthToJim
    January 6

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    The first part of this is nice enough (the word "stran" could use a "d" -- strand -- but the last two units have (4) I's and (2) me's which seems a little over heavy in pronoun usage. All in all a nice reflection though.

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    • michellemybelle gold member
      January 6
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      Thank you Jim, I agree with what you said. I am editing some, although I want the I to be strong, but could be less. I appreciate your help!
      blessings,
      Michelle

  • michellemybelle gold member
    January 6

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    Thank you for your comment, I am glad you like the ending. I believe this time of year encourages us to ponder life of the past year and what we want out of the new.
    blessings,
    Michelle

  • stavykm gold member
    January 6

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    I Really Enjoyed Your Poem

    What a light hearted read. It was wonderful as I read from the start to the finish. I think I felt like I was there and the imagery is awesome. The flow of your poem is beautiful too. I'm so grateful I clicked for it reminded me to live in the moment and the past like you said in the end, but now I know I am whole a part of it lives in me. Fabulous. Thank you for sharing your gift to write poetry with me.
    Many Blessings
    Kelle Marie
    stavykm

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    • michellemybelle gold member
      January 6
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      Kelle Marie,
      thank you for your kind comment. I am so glad you enjoyed this. I felt fortunate to have had a day of peace and silence, so I am glad I was able to bring a piece of that to you. thank you for saying I have a gift!
      blessings,
      Michelle

  • oceanlover12
    January 6
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    O.O

    Wonderful! Absoutely breathtaking!

  • PerVirtuous gold member
    January 5

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    Wonderful! You are an inspiration to all of us. Thank you for sharing your thoughts and your muse.


  • flowerystone0
    January 5
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    Beautiful.

    Very descriptive. I love the ending.


  • Passive
    January 5

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    I liked the descriptions of the house, how they gave the poem a serene feeling, the cat bit made me very happy ^^, good thinking, I hope you keep up work like this ^

  • Dimples-HD
    January 5

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    This was absolutely beautiful. I am at a place where I am looking for that "wholeness" again. For me, it won't come in a house, but still it was so easy to relate to thid piece. Beautifully penned.

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    • michellemybelle gold member
      January 5
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      thank you for saying this is beautiful and finding the peace. No, wholeness is never found in a home or anything else, but from within. Keep searching you will find her, she lives in you.
      blessings,
      Michelle

  • sunshinegirl
    January 5

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    Sis,

    What a read! This is peaceful, and brought me much enjoyment as I was reading! Also left me thinking about a few things, that I have not wanted to think about today..... Thanks sis!!!

    and love

    Nyetta


  • High Flyer gold member
    January 5
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    This was such a peaceful write. It took me to a place I have not been in for awhile. This poem's imagery was absolutely wonderful. I definitely have no critical opinion toward this write at all. Great job!!

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    • michellemybelle gold member
      January 5
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      What a great compliment, thank you! I am glad you enjoyed this and appreciate you saying so.
      blessings,
      Michelle
  • meaningfull
    January 5
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    Home is always apart of all of us! Thankyou for sharing this write!!


  • Endeavor gold member
    January 5

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    Excellent x2


    I used to think
    I left a part of me there

    but now I know
    I am whole
    a part of it
    lives in me

    More than a verse but a wonderfull story
    You are blessed to have found this voice

    Proude of every word you write
    because I know you

    Love, Rick

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    • michellemybelle gold member
      January 5
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      Thank you Rick. I lost my muse over new years champagne, but found her today! thank you for your kindness and for being proud, my friend.
      love,
      Michelle

  • Jalalbad gold member
    January 5
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    this is a great write, one that I enjoyed very much.


    • michellemybelle gold member
      January 5
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      thank you Judy, for reading and your comment. I am pleased you enjoyed this!
      blessings,
      Michelle

  • azlyn gold member
    January 5

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    Oh Sis...you sure did find her! I have to read this again...just linger in it and feel! I am so touched by this, feels like a part of your beautiful soul...exposed for all to treasure. Beautiful my friend...just as you! I love it so! The pic makes my heart dance!

    Wonderful...perfect...ahhhhhh~
    Sue


    • michellemybelle gold member
      January 5
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      Thank you Sue! YOu are so sweet. I am still tweeking this a bit, but it felt sooo good to write! thank you for seeing my soul as beautiful!
      love you my friend
      Michelle
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