loneliness consumes the mind
like a virus
it takes over rational thought
when i sit or lay in my bed
all i do is wish someone was next to me
my love is slowly fading
pain in its place
emotions kill the body
drive people to grate feats
and leads people to desolate regions
when i think of the ones i loved
my mind goes to places i never hoped
to forget and wish i did
people try to push me to be in relationships
but i try to stay out of them
i fight myself
to quarantine my heart
and tell them "I'm not ready"
i know what will happen
i will fall in love again
pour myself into it
try to be that persons one true
only to be hurt again
what is wrong with me
am i unlovable
am i a lost cause
is my love not right
i don't care
i wont do it again
i will die alone before i get hurt again
unless i know its true
but will it ever be true
who knows i just hope
i hope but i don't hold my breath
all i want is true love
not a flyby love
not some fortune cookie
that when you break it
says "you will be loved"
how come everyone else can just go for it
and get what they want
love is a virus i don't need
but i want so bad
Author notes
“Rawr Monkey”
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A contest entry
- ♥ Anything goes! ♥ by vampireblood.
430 points, ended March 3, 2008, 69 entries
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wow wowow wowowow
I enjoyed reading this so powerful beyond words well done -
This was really good.
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i love this its exzactly how i feel on the matter
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This was a pretty good piece. I did have one problem though. You didnt capitalize any of your I's and thats one of my biggest pet peeves. But other then theat it was a good piece.
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is that a recent pic of you fat ass timmy the tooth mothafuckdamn shit cake. lol....
lookin good bro. still timmy. saw your bro yesterday. hes gettin fatter. hahahahahahah.... anyway bad stuff cleared up "mostly" and feelin a litttle better. its weird to see you. come home fucker.
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“Rawr Monkey”
i hopr this is close enogh to the author notes for you -
Sorry this doesnt fit the contest descriptions, i like it, but the contest is for poems about missing someone who died xx
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i know
i know the pain of knowing that i will never be loved - i was not created for that - unlovable - i try to accept the lonliness - the knowledge that if i love it will never be returned - i know your pain
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Even though you feel like this, you shouldnt ever give up....as stupid and over rated as that may sound....and as much as I used to hate to say it , its very true.
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I'm sorry you know how to feel this... I am sorry that you feel so miserable and along. yeah love really is a virus sometimes in my eyes. I just hate being lonely, makes me want to cry sometimes.
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The last two lines are powerful! I love it. Good job, Tim.
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line 9: great
The idea of the poem was good, but I feel that it lacked rythem. The meter was all over the place and your sentences ran into each other constantly. I don't mean to be cruel, but it was not a great poem. I think you just need to work a little more on the way you write.
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thanx for the input i dont write with any real ryme or reason i just put thoughts down on paper and the structer is what ever it is but i have always said if someone dont like my poems ok if they do ok again thanx for the input i love the poem so i dont think it matters if the flow is "good" or "bad" peace you should read my othe poems that might help you to understand my style
tim
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ahh i used to know this feeling, but now i have the greatest, and most incredible experience with love good poem and some day you'll have it (again?)
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thanx for the kind words im happy you liked it so offten people get caght up with form ans ryme that they forget to read into the meaning i dont worry to much about love anymore not after the therd attemp and the thred crash and burn
tim
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