Old Mother Hubbard, slammed shut her cupboard,
something gave her a scare!
Her dog thought it queer, that who had appeared
stood in the room quite bare.
In front of the horde, naked to the Lord
bent Humpty, over easy.
Just slightly behind, no less unrefined
Bo Peep was gettin' sleazy.
Over in the corner, little Jack Horner
grinned like the Cheshire Cat;
as he proudly mooned the Cow, Dish and Spoon
and fiddled as he sat.
Farmer in the Dell is likely off to hell
as he tore off his shirt;
grabbing Jill by her waist, the two of them chased
Muffet to peel off her skirt!
Feeling quite ashamed, Ma Hubbard exclaimed
she was put off by such tactics!
But the crowd cared not, they were a drunken lot
on the verge of being climactic.
These naked cohorts, had an orgy of sorts
there on the kitchen floor.
But when they finished and lust diminished,
'Ole Hub was mighty sore!
Author notes
As with all my poetry, I appreciate constructive feedback so that I can improve as a writer. Please give it to me straight, I'm a big boy, I can take it.
A contest entry
- GIVE ME SOME LAUGHS!!! by Mrs D.
650 points, ended February 10, 30 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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confused and amused..not what I was expecting...but alot of fun....have you been smoking something new? -
Boy, I came upon a piece that sounded so much not you, yet it was and i was flabbergasted. It was great and your humor was so befitting the story you told. Who would have thought these little nursery rhyme people could get up to so much mischief? An excellent piece. Gonna have to keep plowing through your cupboard here and find more masterpieces which you are perfect at writing.
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amuzing....
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I Love it.
This is my kind of poetry. I really enjoyed it. I had to go down your list a ways to find something I hadn't commented on. Great fun write.
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Personaly I love it when someone ventures from thier normal style and material. Its good to show many sides and not lock yourself in. Funny as hell. Gotta love a poem that makes me laugh out loud.
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So I see another side of you that I'd not seen before. Can't say I prefer this even though I'm definetly not a prude. My fear is always that the great work I have done, if there is any, will be diminished or put away by something that falls below the grade but not below the radar. My aim is always that all be included. Come one come all. Is this piece kind of a Service type piece on the edge as I have still not read him and apologize for having not done so. RC
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lol...ooooh delightfully wicked...I like this side of you, Cowboy
Love, lane
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I really like this, it made me laugh! I read it to my husband, but I don't think this is one I'll be reading to my kids! lol
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this is funny...very creative.
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Oh this was a riot! Your syntax is a bit off but it shows great promise. Keep up the good work and I can't wait to read more
Charity
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think she was a little more than goosed, so that's what people get up to with no food in the house!!
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Although the rhyming is a bit uneven in parts, Rory, your "nursery rhyme" is so much fun that it hardly matters. I was greatly amused by this write.
Bill
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Where the heck did this come from?(peels of laughter)Nursery Rhymes will never be the same again.must remember never to tell them this way to the grandkids lol.(not until they're much older anyways...great fun write....mal
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