Little penguin Pete,
was quite wobbly on his feet,
but on contact with the ocean;
he swam with stream-lined motion.
From steep rocks he made a dash
and produced a mighty splash
and Pete soon got his wish;
with a beak of tasty fish.
Pete loved to play and lark;
one day he chased a baby shark.
Mrs Shark was not too happy;
being protective, made her snappy.
She didn't think to pause,
as she snapped Pete in her jaws.
Pete became a quivering jelly,
as he passed from jaws to belly!
But Mrs Shark was off her food;
spat Pete out, which was quite rude.
He was battered, bruised and beaten,
but at least he wasn't eaten.
The experience left its mark,
he'd never chase another shark.
The moral of this little story?
don't get mauled and end up gory.
Whilst little penguins are delightful
Adult sharks can be quite spiteful!
Please tell me what you think
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Ever notice that some animals are more fun than others to write about? Now penguins and cows are fun to write about but I doubt we'd get a smile from our readers if we wrote about a giraffe or a gnu.
I like penguins, probably because they waddle when they walk. Yep, I'm a simpleton.
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This is very cute indeed. I think you did pretty well with the form, flow and rhyme here. There is a line or two that the meter seems slightly off, but nothing major. I really enjoyed this Well done.
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This is a very sweet poem. I love penguins! This would make a great childrens book, or it would go great in one. I love the entire poem, very cute message and a exciting read, amazing flow and great word choice, just very fun! I think my favorite parts were the first two lines and the second stanza. Great poem!
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AWE! how wonderfully cute! You have an excellent rhyming poem. It was very well penned. Very awesome. I enjoyed reading about little penguin pete. Did you perhaps write it with younger readers in mind?
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Of your very best and simply delightful, lovely rhyme.
Penguin Pete a lucky chap
Escaped the shark's most mighty snap
Now decided to be good
Behaving as all penguins should
Chases fish to eat for tea
But baby sharks? Oh no Sirree!
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Hehe. What a cute poem! I enjoyed every line. This seems like a poem that you would read to a child. Though some of your words were a bit awkward, and your rhymes seemed to be a bit off at points, it was overall a great poem.
Great job!
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A sweet poem, very well rhymed, and with a great flow and story. congrats on a great write
lucy
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A very good story poem. Very nice rhythm. Good imagery, flow, rhyme and tone. Nice depth of feeling. Nice moral to the story. An entertaining piece. Well penned and much enjoyed.
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