She walks in fear
of what but herself
she hopes he can't see
the mistakes she's made
and has not forgiven herself for
she hopes
she hopes that the scars won't show
that her mistakes will not follow her
like her shadow has so many times before
and caused her to trip
on the darkest day
she lights up the room
but why, she ask herself
why is he, of all people
blind to her light
Author notes
Enjoy!
A contest entry
- you left this feeling here inside me by CarCrashHumor.
600 points, ended February 23, 2008, 19 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Comments
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"of what but herself"
that line could use some polishing I think, maybe a different word choice
"why is he, of all people
blind to her light" good ending!
thanks for entering -
wow
i love it... i loved the last stanza... good luck in the contest... i wouldnt change a thing i think its perfect
XXX he broke my heart
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