It was snowing but the ambulance pushed through
to not have my suicide lieu slide past glacial blue.
I hadn't the window to know where I was going
'til lock opened tracks, they said come in sans sing
clinical cosmically I'm tired but don't need to sleep
rest resolve peep yes sir can be so scared to keep
the door closed with diagnosis
which husband missed sum hiss
but now by habit uses to put me in my place
as if making the phone call all over again under ace
but I dance around the issue pun punted for oxygen,
obsessive compulsive convulses gets compliments again
disorder surprisingly intelligent tainted
as ignoring dark coconut rightly painted
with case exposed for emphasis in stress relief class
where I was eloquent physically with lyrics that has
approval as reading to flex writing, extra curricular
was side dish off indigestable tray, margins vascular
never straining at faucet moisture
pour of hidden expression to be sure, mean imagery pure
nourish understanding, stop start isn't only peace of house
snap down pain brain took too much two weeks zip spouse
managed experiment of ends to home, then as book in use
discipline meds wasn't discovery, prescription paper muse.
new chapter wasn't for chapped lips of shout
but spitting out what I wasn't to be about
shuffling recipes or eliminating wads and gobs even to his/hers,
I didn't split marriage but ingredients milk's gone for me occurs
with adult fruit and vegetable logic to stages for gents
examples transferred to improvement of mamma through tents
breastfeeding got a caret
until I could care about my new tooth with ret
against rot long after that real infancy,
amalgam glued immature hadn't cornered as dunce, see
letting go was only through alleviating mercury
not marching to cure or labeling offensive with fury
to frustrated friendship sending wrong meeting
in rage rave given only from ranting
softening was a channel of calm
with union not from anatomy out only the balm
Author notes
OH DEAR I have to restructure for rhyming,
I'll leave this in to edit if that's okay before judging
but it's basically there in idea by my ring
I have no excuse, just wanted to talk
over decade ago shock
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OK, original --
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mamma was taken away in an ambulance,
daddy got confused by me and another man diagnosed.
obsessive compulsive I saw two weeks without family
until it got disciplined to experiment home then go.
they loved my eloquent dance
when I was physically the lyrics
in stress relief class
and the radio was heard for approval
as reading helps inflection to flex writing
but not prescriptions for strain at faucet
pouring on hidden expression,
questions came out in wrong meeting
while friendship frustrated
isn't for labeling them with offense,
there are answers to be human if at odd hour
breastfeeding was careted
until I could care about my new tooth
gotten long after infancy, amalgam glued immature
and letting go was only through alleviating mercury
no compounding meds would be the discovery
as oxygen and a channel of calm
with union not from anatomy out only
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1. Being locked up in a psychward. What's it like there?
good luck makes us not want something more important
please don't use emoticons or the applause but your pauses,
though a rose is a sweet shortcut
A contest entry
- For all of the CRAZY poets out there... by AutumnsFlame.
973 points, ended March 15, 2008, 31 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Comments
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WOW... You restructured the whole poem so it rhymed? Good Lord... I didn't expect anyone would do that... major points for effort!... okay... the language here was kind of hard to follow... I haven't seen anyone like that before. It was very unique, but I'm not sure if that's in a good way or a bad way. Good job on this. I can tell you worked hard... Thank you for entering my contest!
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