'Silent Crack'
Memories, pain,
Faintest things
That won't die with me
Gasping air, so burned so filled
My plane it breaks
And to fall we will
As branches break
Solid ground it wills
More breaks I hear
But not of Natures own
For dust to dust
I will not burn
But my eyes they see
What my soul will know
A light so bright,
So white,
Heaven knows
My time to go,
To bring me home
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©Nicolette Everett 1/5/08
Author notes
Rules:
~Regular AP rules apply.
~I don't want to see bashing of the wars, I don't like any of the wars either, but I still honor the men and women who where in them.
~They can come from any point of view/perspective. You can speak as if you where that solider being in the war (even if you were or weren't).
~Just be respectful.
~Really looking for imagery, metaphors, what they went through, seeing the war(s) in my minds eye, and feeling it.
~I want newly written poem's, but pre-writtens are alright too.
http://allpoetry.com/contest/2378618
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- Enter Your Own contest by CarolDesjarlais.
525 points, ended January 7, 2008, 8 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Tell Me What You Think..........
Comments
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vivid imagery...I was taken into the belly of a brother's plane...the one that did not return. ty for entering.
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This is a keenly introspective work of poetry. It's almost as if you went lurking deep inside to unearth some truths.
"For dust to dust
I will not burn
But my eyes they see
What my soul will know"
Those lines run to the depths of thought in mind and spirit. I like this entry and it makes me inquisitive as to what your contest was about. I'll have to click the link. I wish you well in Carol's Comp.
Much Love ♥
Renee
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lots of images here to see in the readers minds eye (that doesn't sound right...) anyway, very vivid write and it tells a point of view well.
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such vivid imagery in this wonderfully penned piece. I really enjoyed reading it. Best of luck to you in this contest.
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