The moonbeams used to dance with allure and delight,
as they fluttered over her body all throughout the night,
for her sensuous movements, made them frolic and play,
so my nights made me eager, to see the end of each day.
The rustle of the trees outside and sound of slithering silk,
as sinuous light patterns danced, upon skin of lustrous milk.
The aroma of fresh wet hair and of skin honey dew sweet,
that enclosed her tender body, from top of head to tiny feet.
Memories of husky whispers and her most intimate moans,
thrilled me as they mingled with my own impulsive groans,
and I stare in anguish at the patterns, icy still upon the sheet,
nights are endless until next week, when again we will meet.
The moonlight sparkles softly where my tears so quietly fell,
as I endure the pain of loneliness and the consequential hell.
These nights without passion and her not being by my side,
only serve to toughen the bonds, between us so tightly tied.
So my anguish continues on, as I dream of her by my side,
and the feeling that has arisen, for love has grown to pride,
but the thrill of seeing her and our first impatient embrace,
will make pain worthwhile, by the smile that lights her face.
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Author notes
Mylee
In a list
A contest entry
- What Is Your Fantasy? by Pollycheck.
450 points, ended March 27, 2008, 7 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - The Yearn of a Turn by whispernthedark.
685 points, ended July 26, 2008, 14 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - I'm alone......are you? by movedon.
700 points, ended November 25, 2008, 103 entries
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I really loved "impatient embrace". This is a wonderful write, full of pain & longing but also you still feel the happines that these people shared. Thank you for entering the contest, good luck.
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whisper
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I think this is most beautifully written
Very loving, sensual, and a most wonderful fantasy
All the very best to you...always! -
Very lovely indeed well rhymed and a lovely trill
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Love it Usually it can get messy with so many different emotions in one poem, but you've pulled it off perfectly. You really convey how the subject is feeling and your scene descriptions are great. I love the sense of hope at the end. Well done
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Thank you for entering my contest. This is a very well written poem. You have painted a very beautiful picture with your words.
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I like what you've done, your poems panned out
burnt senses yearning, and a last stanza pout
sounds like your missing, a relationship key
leaving you wanting, much more than can be
a very nice flow, a ryhme that is great
story lines plot, written check mate
rudolf
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This was really good!! Good luck in the contest!!!
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Amazing write!
Good luck in the contest
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Wow,,,,,,,,,,,,
This is so passionate,and loving and honest, and heart breaking.
"The moonlight sparkles softly where my tears so quietly fell,
as I endure the pain of loneliness and the consequential hell.
These nights without passion and her not being by my side,
only serve to toughen the bonds, between us so tightly tied."
I had to read this twice, so sweet and tender.
Loved every line.
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The nights are always so long when you are alone and missing your lover. You have truly described the heart of longing and dreaming. I have known these feelings and they torment you throughout the entire night and into the morning. Thank you for sharing your heart.
Soulful Woman
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This is amazing. I really enjoyed reading this sexy piece of poetry. Although, I was a little saddened at the end.
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Thank you for the lovely comments and applause but I must ask what it is that made you saddened at the end. I thought a happy ending was Ok but maybe you have interpreted it differently. I would be interested in how you saw it.
Barry
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very good
a great read
lots of good imagery
and the theme is really cool
a lost love, a absent lover
laying there
waiting for her to return
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This is a heartfelt poem that describes the different shades of love, and the amount of hurt and pain that goes into it. The moments we cherish are always interspersed with tears as well - and that's exactly what makes the game interesting, and life worth living. My favourite lines:
"The moonlight sparkles softly where my tears so quietly fell,
as I endure the pain of loneliness and the consequential hell.
These nights without passion and her not being by my side,
only serve to toughen the bonds, between us so tightly tied"
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WOW
Hey i really like this poem. A fst flow to it but very sensious. Pain, at times, can feel so good. But you gotta be careful > not too much pain. I am a wee short on applauses.
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A stunning romantic write...
I love this...
Amazing beauty, I adore the imagery...
Peace and many blessings
~A~
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very romantic
This is a very fine romantic piece you have penned my friend
The rhyme and flow are near perfect, and the story would warm up even the coldest heart
I love the last two lines as they describe what true love really is.Any pain endured is always worth the end result.Thank you for sharing this wonderful piece with us and keep up the awesome work.
Don
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Very Well Done
I enjoyed the words described to make your poem come alive. I loved the line "The moonlight sparkles softly where my tears so quietly fell,
as I endure the pain of loneliness and the consequential hell."
You have talent.
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Hi Bazza. Remember me? Nice to see a poem from you. I don't know what to put as a comment, because I have said it all before, and it's good to see you're still doing what you're doing.
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Dear Marie
Hi Marie, it is good to hear your voice again and although I dont have your photo I have associated a voice and so it is just as good. I am in Thailand now and soon to be married. I have found the woman whom I have been waiting a lifetime for and am convinced that the wait was worth the pain. I hope you are well and I hope to be more active soon once I have settled in and got used to a wife and five daughters. A daunting task but I always rise to the challenge and proud of it. Take care My Sweet, for you are still a deeply entrenched inspiration that will never fade. I can draw on the feelings I need by reading your work so I have to be satisfied with that, for they are a piece of you that you have kindly given to me. Happy New Year and all the very best.
Take care,
Barry
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Wow! Bazza getting wed! Wow! Good on yer, Bazza! Oh I do hope you will be very, very happy. She's getting just about the best bloke in the world!
M
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Dreamy
Romantic and lovely- you can never go wrong with dancing moonbeams, intimate moans and anguish- seriously, you write beautifully- so much feeling and longing... take heart in the knowledge that your prison of lonliness is a short lived one...
This is a wonderful tribute to the woman who has captivated your heart and imagination.
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Time is short as I am in an Internet Cafe in Bangkok where I have spent the last week in a Festival in a Buddhist Temple helping my Fiance (Toy) count the donations. Different but we manage to spend the day with each other so I am contented. We sllep on a floor (no mattress) and yet I love it. Waiting a lifetime has been so worth the pain and so I am grateful that at last my dreams have come true. A few new psts too so I must go. Take care. By the way, check out the work by Marie Bheag who is a scottish poet who inpires me to heights that I have never climbed before.
Take care,
Barry
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Very Good
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Oh my, that was simply amazing. The visuals brought sighs. Nicely done!
Hugs, Tisha
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Perhaps one of the most sensuous and tenderly written pieces I have had the honor to read in quite some time, Brudder! I know the feelings encapsulated in this fine piece all too well, to be sure!
The piece in it's entirety is fantastic, but I most especially enjoyed those first two stanzas!!! Flawlessly penned, BrudderBaz...BRAVO, indeed!!!!
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This is absolutely beautiful. You have written this with such tenderness and passion and I can almost feel the longing from every word. Well done, this is really great.
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