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Painted Black and White

She stands like a statue,
A clashed masterpiece,
Black on white.

In front of world
Her words must be let out.

She reads from her mind,
and although no one is there
to hear her speak.

She's free.

Any good?

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  • Ja Vorbesc
    February 6, 2008

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    I like this...I'm really sorry that I can't give you any more detail or explanation, but sometimes I just have trouble with that sort of thing. Question:
    A clashed masterpiece,

    Can something be clashed? Clashing, maybe, but I've never heard clashed. I'm skeptical. And I don't know what you mean by 'clashed' either. Controversial? Rough? What? If twere me, which tisn't, i'd consider a different word choice.


  • leander Moderators member
    January 17, 2008

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    Ooh, I quite like this one it has a soft and soothing feel to it actually. I especially love the first stanza great image in there, very powerful and it drew me in immediately

    Thank you for entering the contest - I wish you the very best!
    Leander


  • XmoonchildX
    January 5, 2008
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    that was very moving. I liked the simplicity but the meaning is so sweet.


  • Tarja
    January 5, 2008

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    That is amazing. Thank you so much for entering this. I love it and I'm sure she will too. (It deserves a better background though!) I think you really captured that moment in this piece. Fabulous job. Good luck.