Painful Love

So often I wake to the sounds of you

Finger down my back, as only you can do

So often I feel the heat of your sting

The burn of anger, only you can bring

So often I taste the hate from your breath

The pain in my heart, thoughts of your death

So often I see the beauty in your eyes

Turn my back, stumble in your lies

So often I weep, alone in my pain

All of your promises made in vain

So long to you, and all that you've done

Don't test my temptations, for you I have none.

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option 5~~loving someone who doesn't love you back

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InMyFlames
February 26, 2008

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"So often I weep, alone in my pain
All of your promises made in vain" i love these lines they are beautiful and deep i thank u for taking the time to enter i loved this
LeilaJayne
January 15, 2008

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Sorry this isnt long enough for my contest.
I do really like it though but im going to have to take it out. I asked for a minimum of 16 lines. x
Barely Breathing
January 12, 2008

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This is such a great write. You have really done well here, and I loved the ending, especially the last line. Really well written, best of luck for the contest.
cypoetry
January 11, 2008
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wow, i loved it. the ending was incredible
AutumnsFlame
January 11, 2008
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This was a pretty good poem... it didn't WOW me, but it was still pretty good. The repetitiveness added to it... and the ending was pretty darn good... What you could work on though is the flow.... listen to how the sylabols line up with each other in each line.... Thank you for entering my contest!
over the rainbow--x
January 6, 2008
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Wow, I loved that ending && how you made your point in so few words.
Thank you so much for entering,
Although can you please re-read the rules, you have missed a quotation && also what option number this is.
If you could amend this that would be great,
Thank you [=

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