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[alone]

Void was all around him,
As he starred into life's opened arms,
A little piece of him will stay with the sea forever;
His hope.

Beware as the sky unfolds,
It curtains all in black,
So to shed the light,
he must hold his head high,
And let go of his fear of being alone.

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  • amaranthine lover gold member
    January 7, 2008

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    I like how you played with the wording in this piece, nicely done, please keep on writing


  • creationsfromheart
    January 5, 2008

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    In your poem this says it all

    Beware as the sky unfolds,
    It curtains all in black,
    So to shed the light,
    he must hold his head high,
    well done and good luck!


  • volcaniclastic
    January 5, 2008

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    Beautiful poem.

    'he must hold his head high,
    and let go of his fear of being alone.'

    A feeling I think many people can relate to.