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[ I'm filled with life but I'm no illusion. ]

I'm filled with life but I'm no illusion.
I'm just a simple illustration,
Presented in the best fashion,
Painted with the appropriate passion.

I've been modified to complete satisfaction,
I've faced critics and startled reaction.
I'm like the Favorite Son's retaliation,
A forced mental contemplation.

I give off fatal interaction,
I can cause a concussion,
I can get by with anything; its my distraction.
And if you're dissatisfied ask for a correction.


I am love, the worst kind of attraction.

Author notes

'It still is in my heart and therefore it will forever live inside of me."

Wow...this is very weird for me haha. I saw the line and I wrote this...and it was very hard.

They all don't have perfect rhymes, but theyre half rhymes...so forgive me?

Any good?

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  • xxRainbowDawnxx
    January 6, 2008

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    I like the flow of this write, yeah I liked the quote it's very passionate and expressive.

    I like the way each word ends with 'ation'... What a great transaction... Just being silly now!

    Thanks so much for entering my contest!


  • XmoonchildX
    January 5, 2008

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    oooh that was so cool ^_^ the ending was so great! rhyming was good cant believe there are so many word that end in 'ion'