I tutored you
Taught you everything you know
And you turn your back on me
Went and followed other dreams
I have given you your strength
Your courage for staying where you are
And all I get in return is betrayal
Why have you done this to me!
Your dreams were bound to destroy you
Turn your face away from all of my hopes
All of my expectations
How could you not see?
How could you not see your own wrongs?
But now it does not matter
It never shall from this point on
For you will pay for your insolence
Pay for wronging me so cruelly
You shall curse the day you did not heed my warning
The day you lost your heart to those foolish dreams
And beginning of the longest night of my personal hell
Author notes
This is the second option from my favorite movie, "The Phantom Of The Opera"....please let me know if there is anything i could do to improve this.
Contest-Earthquake! Duck!
A contest entry
- 3 options by CharlotteRose.
450 points, ended February 17, 2008, 17 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
tell me how i did plz.
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I have never seen the movie, but I got a different interpretation from this poem. I felt like it was a parent to a child who was not living their life the way the parent expected them to do. In that sense, I find it highly original, since I would commonly find the poem in the POV of the child. Nicely presented, even though it isn't really the interpretation you expected (probably).
M a r l u x i a
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Thank's again, and yes that was a totally different interpretation then i expected
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Welp, thanks how I viewed it and interpretations help the reader enjoy it, whether or not it's in the way you wanted it to be! Lol
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Yep.....lol
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In the first line of the third stanza you spelled "bound" wrong. Other than that, this was very nice, and put the emotion of the phantom into more modern-day terms. thx for entering and keep up the great work!
~CharlotteRose~
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thank you very much for the spelling error i missed. Your welcome, and i will definently try to keep it up.
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oh i really like this the betrayal is portrayed well
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Thank you very much!
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