scattered,shattered,tattered,
and broken.her heart is no longer
spoken.its broke in to peices
for many different reasons.
its scattered because its in more
than one place.its shattered
because its more than she
can take.its tattered cause
she cant deal with her
fate.and its broken
because of him.
but its healed from a friend.
a broken heart is coming together
again.she thinks she has found new love and
hopefully her heart wont get broken again.
it will no longer be scattered,shattered,tattered,
and broken.its all better cause her new loves spoken.
Author notes
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WORD PROMPT: Scattered
A contest entry
- #6 OPTIONS CONTEST (: by Walk-Free.
700 points, ended January 6, 2008, 15 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Round One of Five by Kei-Aira.
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this has a lot of different emotions in it.her heart is broken then its healed then comes a new love and triumph.congrats on the gold.this is a nice write.
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You have expressed a rather unique take here on the subject at hand. Well written with good imagery and imagination. Thank you for sharing and best wishes to you. Keep that pen handy dear poet.
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Way to Go!!!!!!!!
Love,
Mom -
WOW.
I loved this!
At first when I took a look at this
poem, I thought it was going to be
a freeverse. But now that I read it
I see it's muchly enjoyable when the
rhyming isn't only at the end! Wow,
you well earned the golden trophy.
Nice job.
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NICE ONE DUDE!!!!!!
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Wow. It sounds like a song.
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A wonderful read.
One error:
Third stanza first line, you spelt "healed" as "heald"
Other that that, good job
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