Who longs to see the thin white bones?
Who knows of her, and what she knows?
What of the air that provides us life?
And Ana who becomes thy wife?
Companion to hold the pain away,
provide the hurt, & sweet bouquet?
To resist the wine, but enjoy the scent,
to fight the urge, then give consent?
A sweet escape, but prison so defined,
to live not in the world, but in your mind.
An obsession so about control,
becomes more about what you withhold.
A denial true, and lost was found.
A secret flourished, then unbound.
A friend found in a common foe,
if she wants you, she'll let you know.
It seems to seek you, you don't find.
If gives you sight, but keeps you blind.
Distorts the view and blurs your eyes,
drowning in the silent lies.
The truth comes out from months of void,
a goal is reached, a life destroyed.
A force that comes to violent ends,
and she waits until it starts again.
Hiding in the shadows dark,
alone, but comforted, they embark.
To find what let the restraint fail,
and to make you perfect, to no avail.
A pressure coming from all sides,
what you thought they wanted, now to hide.
You know what they desire, if they deny,
and to what this flaw applies.
Shadow, shadow, creeping near,
oh to silent for to hear.
Deadly, at rest, it sneaks by,
modest unbroken to defy.
Deeper, deeper, it stalks near!
Oh to silent for to hear!
Danger danger, coming close,
a death so painful and morose.
Shes gone, shes gone, don't wait rejoice.
Freedom from a tortured voice,
listening to her blistered call,
and fateful death, and barren fall.
Author notes
This applies to options 10, 17 & 20.
A contest entry
- Poems of the end by AnthonyLavin.
400 points, ended February 10, 2008, 10 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Prompt Prewrites Welcome, But stay on subject by mysticstorm.
475 points, ended March 5, 2008, 12 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Wow this is gold materail
this is perfect!
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BRAVO! BRAVO!
sweet escape, but prison so defined,
to live not in the world, but in your mind.
An obsession so about control,
becomes more about what you withhold.
My Goodness, those were really POWERFUL WORDS!
You did this really really well!
ears2hearyou
Kathleen : ))
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very good...Just dark enough for me to love it...Great write and I will be sure to let you know when I post more...hehe...This was seriously awesome....most people dont like long poems but this was more epic and not boring at all...It never lost my intrest..Great job,
Stephanie
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oh wow.
this is amazing. i'm truly left searching for words.
i can relate to this all to well. It's something that sadly many people can relate to. And it makes one dealing with it feel like there is hope... even when there doesn't seem to be. I have the feeling though that once it is gone, it may not be gone for good.
i don't think i'll ever truly get over it.
This piece is flawless. The rhyme was amazing.
you made it flow so well and picked the perfect
verbatim.
greaaaaaaaaaat job
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I know exactly what you mean. Like even if you think its gone its really just waiting in the sidelines, wanting to push through, looking for any weakness in the armor.
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Not bad ...
not bad at all. I'm amazed to be getting all these dark poems though, since I don't normally care for dark poems. However, I did not say don't enter them, so that's my mistake. As to the poem, you've done a good job here, even though it's a bit obscure at times. All in all, I like it.
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Fuck. This is amazing.
- Jojo x sinnocence
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Well written piece here
Its as though you took me for a walk within the fear the unbelievable tortures of the mind and in the end pulled me through with you .Excellent write here
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Made me cry.
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wow......
when I come up with something other than that I'll let you know....
but for now just.....
wow.....
great job
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Just.
Holy shit.
~Asa of the
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Damn.
I dunno what to say.
That's the best poem I have ever read.
If I could give you 9999999999999999999999999999999999 (x)(that's the infinity sign) smilies, I would....
holy shit.
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