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Dearest half of my heart

Unspeakable Absence
I order you to flee!

Return to me
lost friend of forever
dearest half of my heart
sweetest sound from yesterday!

Without your color
my day is grey.
Without your voice
my music is shrill noise.
Without your silhouette
sad tears surround me.

Days ago
no ~ years ago
no ~ decades ago
(how can Time steal so much?)
we made covenant
to be together forever
friends ~ best friends ~ bestest friends ~
the covenant remains
without your promise here.

I love you lonely.
I miss you moment by moment.
I wish you with wonder.

Dearest half of my heart
return and revive our bond!

 

Today is all that counts.
While I still have breath to push
from my soul to the heavens,
I wait for your return.



Author notes

This is for a friend. The years pass but I still look and wait.

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A contest entry

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  • thealexrose
    August 14

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    I've just went through the same thing- except it was my sister. This poem is how I'm feeling right now. It's nice to know I'm not alone here.
    But outside of my sad story this poem is amazing. I connected with it the moment I read the first line.
    A great write as always.

    the 'a' alex


    • thelordreigns gold member
      August 14
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      Hello sweet "daughter" of mine!

      Yes, my friend was/is like my sister. It is a hurt that never heals. I pray all things good and wonderful for you and your sister.

      Love and hugs
  • individuality gold member
    August 13

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    ah time steals at its own pace, it will take a moment when we are not looking or it can be bold and swip a decade when we are


  • Emerald Dog
    July 6

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    This is a wonderfully expressed, passionately poignant poem of longing. I read it with true delight and real connection. I do hope your friend is not lost forever.

  • leo2
    July 5

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    Congratulations on the bronze. Greater love hath no one than to spend their life waiting on a friend. Of course I took certain liberties with the words of Jesus but this had such soothing spiritual overtones I couldn't resist.

    Sincerely,
    Leo Long
    ps. Thanks for reading and commenting on my work. I do appreciate it very much.


  • quantumsurveyor
    June 25

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    If only.....the loss of a friend, through distance, time, whatever is so poignant. Beautifully expressed.

  • PoeticusVeritas gold member
    May 31
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    Although not totally withing the scope of the contest I will allow it. Its really a touching poem though and it is a feeling I know far to well. You kept a good even flow througout the poem and it complimented the mood of the poem well. It was wonderfully done.


  • SEA angel
    May 22

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    Tear jerker...

    If only we could order absence to flee and lost friends and loved ones to instantly reappear. Thank you for your words were so powerful I felt like you could so then maybe I could, too. Thank God for memories when that's all that is left for, at least, that's a window to see beyond the loss. For a moment, remembering how it use to be.


  • Lettingthingsgo silver member
    April 29

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    Great Write Mamma Joe my favorite part was...Without your color
    my day is grey!!! I love love love it


  • bangbaby
    April 15

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    geat poem dear!
    it is love of friend we hold so close to our hearts
    your great keep up the writeing.

  • black hearted rebel
    March 19
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    This was an excellent write!

  • bethan-gaze gold member
    March 16

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    This is a very powerful write, my friend. Lovely words conveyed in such a beautiful sense of anguish and yearning. I can identify with this piece right now.


    • thelordreigns gold member
      March 16
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      Thanks so much. It is good to hear from you. I am sorry I have been so distant. I am going to try to be around more.

      Love and hugs to you always - jo

  • Pamela A Lamppa silver member
    March 3

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    This is such an intense plea. An enjoyable poem to read and linger within. There are pieces of me that too wish for that voice that once sung to my heart with special song, when together, we made a unique whole.

    I have since learned that there are many entires, in different shapes and different forms, and each as enriching as the next.

    What wonders, if we open our eyes, we are so graced to observe.

    Yes, an intense plea that set my mind to thinking. I enjoyed this very much. ~Pamela

  • MargaretG silver member
    March 3

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    This poem has such yearning. Most of the poem is ambiguous about what kind of loss, but explores the depth of it well. Years - decades, but as long as we love, we wait. Best of luck.


  • maa gold member
    March 3

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    a truly beautiful and heartfelt poem spiced with the flavor of longing ... metaphorically and sensitively, you reveal your feelings of nostalgia with soulful words ...

    thank you for this gentle verse,

    maa

  • Samplette gold member
    March 1

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    This is such a beautiful write. Very well written. I enjoyed the read very much. Congratulations on the gold trophy.
    Sam

  • Winklings gold member
    March 1

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    Yes, I would anthologize

    this deeply felt poem. I shall return but thank you for being here.

  • Tirrell
    February 13

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    this is quite beautiful, I love the building sense of scenes, it is laced with a deep subtext of motion, driving a vast and moving emotion. very nice.
    and congrats on your previous trophy. it is a stunning peice.

  • ecrivain01 silver member
    February 13

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    I agree about lines 12 & 13 ...

    as they don't seem to work together at all. Otherwise, this isn't a bad job. You've stated your premise and stuck to it throughout. All in all, not bad.

    • ecrivain01 silver member
      February 13
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      Yes. ;)

      Much better.

    • thelordreigns gold member
      February 13
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      Thank you

      I changed lines 11 and 12.

      When we were little girls, our parents had these black and white silhouettes made for us. The silhouette, like my friend, is lost.

      Thank you for the read and the feedback.

      - jo

  • CitrineSunrise
    January 29

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    You have captured the bewilderment and heartache of a lost friendship. Sometimes we turn it over in our minds to see if we could have done something differently, hoping our friend will return so that we can make amends. My only suggestion is lines 12 & 13 because I think you have a mixed metaphor. "Fragrance", "tears" and "resound empty" don't really work together to further your image. Peace, Liz

  • mysticstorm gold member
    January 28

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    Very beautiful and heartfelt...not many come into our life's that make such an impact, so when someone does we need to hold on...wishing you the best in being close again...well written with love and emotion...
    ThaNK YOU FOR ENTERING!

  • Charity Ann
    January 24

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    This is so beautiful. Even your border and color suits this poem. The rhythm is natural and not forces. It conveys your emotions. Thanks for sharing this. I really like it!


  • waydownuponjoy
    January 23

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    So touching ...

    with a tone of nostalgia that is felt by many who have their garden to tend alone and yet the flowers that bloom after the rain are still there with love. joy


  • Sandal
    January 22

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    I have lost friends like that too, separation is bad, but estrangement gives a pain that is commensurate with its hope. You have excellent phrases for this feeling, especially stanza 3. This is elegant in its sadness.


  • grannyeri gold member
    January 20

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    Some never give up, even though deep inside I think they know the other will not return. Life is worth living, and sometimes life is wasted by these unfulfilled wishes and dreams that things could be the way they used to be. Liked the thoughts shared in these lines- the flow and the hope that they will meet once again - in heaven.

  • DawnBaby gold member
    January 19

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    Excellent

    This write resonates with the loss of a loved one, sad that you could not finish your relationhip. Hope someday you are at least able to speak to this person again and say the things that need to be said.


  • WolfHeart
    January 14

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    Just lovely. It is difficult to lose track of friends. Your words spoke strongly and certainly would convince this friend of your sincerety. I wish you the best of luck in the contest.

    Wolfie


  • SilverButterfly gold member
    January 10

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    oh my gosh what a beautiful poem!!
    to have a friendship with this kind of bond is a true blessing. we should all have atleast one kindred spirit as this!

    I love what you call your absent friend...dearest half of my heart.. very beautiful!!!!

    GBY
    SilverButterfly


  • The Hidden One
    January 9
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    Yes, I to feel the loss of another who I am wating for, this is a nice piece.


  • Pamela A Lamppa silver member
    January 6
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    Such a beautiful piece. While I still have breath to push...Oh that is just so moving. Truly truly wonderful. ~Pamela


  • AliceinPoetryLand Moderators member
    January 6

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    I find this is beautiful and heartfelt plea. I love the emotions that came to me when I read it.
    I jhave heard that term 'bestest' friends before. I think it's very personal and cute
    All the best with this.
    Gaylene


  • zochit2me gold member
    January 5

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    I found the flow of this excellent and the story easy to follow. The only thing that felt out of place was the "bestest" friends you used. It sort of did not fit and set wrong with me when I read it, even when I re read it. Other than that, it was good.

    Becky

    . Rewarded 6


    • thelordreigns gold member
      January 5
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      Thanks so much for the read. The term "bestest friends" was/is our own personal endearing words for our friendship.


  • michichoeret
    January 4
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    wonderful

  • Hardy Parkerson
    January 4

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    Very good!

    There is a bit of the poet in every poem. Human relationships are permanent and become a part of us. Keep up the good work!

    Sincerely,

    Hardy Parkerson - The Retired Lawyer - Lake Charles, LA


    • thelordreigns gold member
      January 4
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      Thank you Hardy. It is good to hear from you. I hope all is well.

      - joanne
  • Redflower562003
    January 4

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    pretty good it seems like you really love someone. I hope everything works out I know how you feel and understand your pain good luck in the contest


  • Cannonsfire silver member
    January 4

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    You will never know how much of this rings true to me, maybe not in the time frame but the emotion of it is the same. We never let go to something we saw as the best part of our hearts, it is the ache that never leaves. Love, C

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