Upon my soul the kiss of light,
cherubs up above,
the Angels sing a tender dream,
at last they send me love.
Forever was born in my heart that day,
my dreams finally came true,
and all that we were became enchantment,
it's always been me and you.
My love.. my soul my life in your hands,
for you I'll always be,
death take me and make me beautiful,
for then I'll finally see.
Author notes
WillAlwaysLove
A contest entry
- Write the missing lines by XxGoldenxXDawnxX.
450 points, ended January 29, 2008, 17 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - 36 -40 ages only Enter your best Prewrite Judged by RedwingSpirit.
475 points, ended January 18, 2008, 17 entries
Honorable mention
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Excellent poem it has wonderful flow and rhyme
Thank you for taking the time to enter my contest. I wish you the best of luck.
REDWINGSPIRIT
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alaways superb
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"Forever was born in my heart that day,
my dreams finally came true,
and all that we were became enchantment,
it's always been me and you."
Very sweet and romantic, nice flow as well hon.
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Brilliant write as always!
"death take me and make me beautiful" - What a powerful line! u rock hun!! Your work is so emotional and powerful.
Bravo Kirsty x -
Nice write.I enjoyed it.
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Beautiful ...as always!!
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Very nice way to express so much love for another. Good luck. Rose
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wow
this is simply amazing..absolutely love this line..
My love.. my soul my life in your hands,
for you I'll always be,
that says soo much..just screams I love you and always will..thanx so much for sharing and best of luck in the contest..love ya sis..
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