Who the hell are you to hate me?
You don't even frigging know me.
You look at me from a distance and despise the man you see.
Hating me because I'm not like you and the people you pretend to be.
Despising me for keeping it real and wishing you could be like me.
Life is no game, it's not meant to be played.
You have questions for me yet you stand in the shade.
You prefer to stay in the dark and not open your eyes.
You hate me and judge me and proceed with your lies.
Who are you to judge who I'am?
Never once have you approached me to lend out your hand.
If this is keeping it real and doing all that you can.
I don't want to be like you, I'd rather be me, a real man.
Author notes
option # 8
option # 6..anger
In a list
A contest entry
- Find out. by warrior-eagle.
700 points, ended February 6, 2008, 10 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - !GOSSIP! by ForeverLastingComa.
450 points, ended May 18, 2008, 18 entries
Honorable mention
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Comments
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Sounds like you understand what really matters in life. Nice poem. Thanks for sharing. Good luck in the contest
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wow! this is just A-M-A-Z-I-N-G! you just managed to write exactly what i feel..I especially liked these lines,
"Who the hell are you to hate me?
You don't even frigging know me.
You look at me from a distance and despise the man you see.
Hating me because I'm not like you and the people you pretend to be.
Despising me for keeping it real and wishing you could be like me.
Life is no game, it's not meant to be played. "
Great write, thank you for entering and Good Luck
~*ForeverLastingComa aka Leesha*~ -
im mad just reading it...
I can feel the anger just reading it, that is anger i can understand. -
I feel.
I feel this way sometimes when a person criticizes me for no good reason. I have yet to know why one girl was so bothered with me in highschool and beyond. I never figured it out. But this is a good piece, one that I wish I could say to her.
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IT flows real easily, and i totally love the anger in it.
I really love what your trying to say in it, and it really is a great peice to read.
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the rhymes flow so easily in this poem, obviously fueled by the anger that you can feel seering through this work. great work.
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emotion expressed well, and the rhyme's not forced. quite nice
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Raw and Angry
I really felt the anger in what you wrote. I like the "don't judge a book by its cover" story that this poem tells. Your poetry is so simply stated making the raw emotion that you are portraying stand out even more. I almost wish that this was non-rhyming because I think that emotional aspect would have shown itself in a non-formulaic manner. I guess that is a matter of preference. -
beautifully penned and it contains somuch strength in your words that i was sitting and nodding my head along best of luck
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Don't know what to say.
I put it in finalist list.
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woo woo you tell them. Such strong words that tell of a strong character...
"Who are you to judge who i'am?"
This line, yes...
and the ending.. wow
"i don't want to be like you, i'd rather be me, a real man."
Thanks for entering and good luck -
this is a really good poem.
i love the line.
this is truly a great poem.
Caycee.
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Thank you.....appreciated
glad you enjoyed it
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I love the third and fourth lines! And the last! The whole poem was good, you're such a great writer! ( =
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thanks alot
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yeah, you're right...this poem is very well written..
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