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One more time

I want to see her again
Just once
Just long enough for her scent to fill the air
so I can  breathe
      old memories.
I want just enough time for her smile
to stain my vision with one moment
of pure
        happiness.
Long enough for the color of her skin
to paint hope through my
dark skies
I want to watch her dancing
and
see her lips pucker the same way mine do when
I dance
I want her to flash me one more smile to blind
my pain
I want to simply tell her
    I
        Love
              You.....  just one more time.....






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To my mother who i think about and miss everyday.....

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  • Bob Fox
    June 2

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    Life

    Life can force us into a state where we come face to face with death and never understand it. this write is so sdaly beautiful and brings back memories of my youth and friends, to this day, I still miss


  • liduen
    March 24

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    Wonderful, beautiful, stunning, breath taking...how else do I say it? An amazing piece that brought a tear to my eye. Your mother would love this poem so much. Congrats on the gold trophy! Stay strong and keep

  • MJ Donnelly gold member
    January 6

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    "I want her to flash me one more smile to blind
    my pain
    I want to simply tell her
    I
    Love
    You..... just one more time....."


    Oh, my dear God, this is beautiful. You've made this big burly guy tear up. I too miss my mother, and father. You have such an amazingly tender heart my dear.


    • Layne..
      January 6
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      Oh, thank you for your sweetness......and hey Real men cry
      Thanks for reading and I loved your new piece
      -Layne

  • Shakes-spear
    January 5

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    Very nice

    We all have feelings like this for some reason or another. Mine is called, "And I Think You Did Too" Loss of a loved one is hard to understand, but we have the memories till we meet again. As I said before...she smiles down at you! Love and kisses, The Shaker


    • Layne..
      January 6
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      Thank you my sweet friend, you are right in that we must hold the memories, one more time would still never satisfy us......

  • moluv10
    January 4

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    a very well written, heartfelt piece my dear. I can understand those types of feelings. makes me think of my brother i lost. we never got the chance to hang out together as adults because he died when we were in high school. i often wish he was here now so we could hang out just one time. thanks for stirring up my emotions with this great piece.


    • Layne..
      January 4
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      thank you for reading. My friends comment below is true though in that we wish for one more chance, but if we got it it would probably still not be satifying... we would still want one more.
  • nothinghere silver member
    January 4

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    I feel this way about my best friend who I lost on Christmas Day on 06... if just for one more moment but Layne, once that moment was over, would we just not wish for one more.... and one more....

    We have to hold tight to all those things you have described....

    Karen


    • Layne..
      January 4
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      I must say you are right. Althought we wish for one more chance, it would never be enough.... I am sorry for your loss as well.....Thank you for your sweet words, you are such a beautiful person...
      -Layne

  • Swangrnv
    January 4
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    BEAUTIFUL!

    I know your mother would love this very touching
    piece! You did well poetess! two thumbs way up!

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