They tell me that a man isn't supposed to cry.
They say it shows weakness but I say it's a lie.
They tell me a man is to hide his tears.
It's wrong to show emotion and acknowledge your fears.
When I see you sitting there and not being able to speak.
With your head in your hands while tears roll down your cheek.
Crying and sobbing because I have damaged your soul.
The things that I have done have taken a toll.
I fear that moment you just might break.
Because of my stupidity and all my mistakes.
Knowing it was I who caused you this pain.
Knowing it is I who's driving you insane.
Tears from my eyes are all I have left.
To show you I love you through all of this mess.
I stand before you a broken man.
Crying and pleading and doing all that I can.
Forgiveness is all I ask from my angel in distress.
I'll cry for an eternity and may my soul never rest.
Weak for a man to cry?
Without you I'd just rather die.
Author notes
I feel, I love, so I live"
option # 1...sad love poem
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- Waves of Emotion by Blooming Poet.
345 points, ended February 3, 2008, 16 entries
Gold trophy winner
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375 points, ended March 3, 2008, 25 entries
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575 points, ended March 8, 2008, 14 entries
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450 points, ended April 1, 2008, 10 entries
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600 points, ended June 13, 2008, 73 entries
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Comments
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wow....I love this it is soo good...I find it to be weird if a man is un willing to cry I mean maybe not in public I don't even do that, but if they refuse to cry at all even when no one is around then it just makes them seem un natral to me...This is such a well written poem...Thank you soo much for entering, Good Luck
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Wow this is so good!
You really touched my heart
And i believe perfectly fine if a man cries
Men are people too and they also have to show emotion
Even if they dont want to or don't realize it in some way they show emotion.
BRAVO!!
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loved it i just hate i wasn't first to crown this you right you have men that think its weak to cry but to me its weaker if you dont because everyone has emotion
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congradulations.
Your poem has been chosen as a preliminary finalist and will recieve applause from me before I decide on the winners. Each poem also gets an additional comment that illustrates why it was chosen as a preliminary finalist.
This was oen of the first poems entered into my contest and I'd already pretty much decided right then that it would be a finalist. I see that this piece has already won several trophies and I'm not int he least suprised. It goes good with the picture. The stand-alone line structure was used well and to the advantage of this piece. The thoughts expressed within are true to both emotion and understanding. Through the first to the last line, this poem holds a very down-to-earth feel while still eloquently expressing the ideas therein.
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Forever Spoken has covered it all... A man might feel that tears are a sign of weakness, but to acknowledge that weakness takes an unspeakable amount of fortitude. When I am a mother, I will teach my son that it's okay to be vulnerable and to show his emotions. Thank you for this lovely poem, and good luck in the contest!
Laura xxx
PS: Normally, I don't give three clappies to anyone, but you have earned them, my friend.
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Thank you
the world needs to relize that tears are not a sign of weakness, truthfully any guy that will cry openly is stronger than most....great write -
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each line is stand-alone and te rhyme scheme lends to the piece. The entrance is good as well as the exit. The middle flows through the piece as well. It's a stationary thought that moves and flows in such a way as to take the reader within the poem's paradigm. Good luck in the contest. -
Wow, this poem is amazing. The wording is simple, but beautiful. I completely agree with this poem also, that it is not weak for a man to cry or show emotion. This poem really shows your heart. Love it.
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Hmm... the imagery could've been a little more spot on and stronger but it was a stunning piece.
Honestly, it speaks for itself. Thanks for the entry
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First off - the picture is hot.
Besides that, awesome poem to go along with it!
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amazing. teared up reading the poem. so yeah. i know what its like to be looked on as a weakling because your a guy and crying. it sucks. good luck and good write
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Thankyou for entering my contest this was a good poem good luck x
For getting into the finalists x
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I love first two lines the most & The whole poem, i guess, interprets them
Very cool job
Thnx for entering & Best of luck
GloriousGift
Heba -
Aww! That was... heartbreaking. It rhymed without sounding stupid, good job. Wow.
Great job, thanks for entering,
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WOW! I love this poem. It expresses so much. It says so many truths. There is also alot of emotion in this poem. Thank you for entering.
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I loved this poem, great work.
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Aw. Wow. This is powerful. There is such love in this poem. It is moving and beautiful, and the picture fits very well.
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This is good and full of emotion. I just have one little issue. Your I's need to be capitilized. It makes your poem look amature, when really its not. You should fix that.
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This piece is beautiful. I think it takes a lot for a man to admit to his emotions, and even more so to acknowledge the fact that he has caused someone pain... and regrets it. Thank you for your entry. It was a great write. ^_^
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My Heart Aches...
this is beautiful. to know that you are responsible for the pain of someone you love...is the most unbearable pain of all. great write.
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Wow. This made me really sad, as it reminded me of something that has happened to me in the past with other people instead. Thanks for entering my contest, and good luck.
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awwwww this was a sweet poem, but you really could use some imagery and description here. Thank you for entering my contest.
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Wonderful. The end wasn't completely satisfying but I loved the rest. You really did a good job and didn't force the rhyming much.
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