When we finally met
I didn't know what to expect
You didn't either I bet
We are comfortable I suspect
A touch of your hand and I'm reeling
You can imagine how I must be feeling
You feel it too I see it in those beautiful blues
Anything for you, I doubt I could ever refuse
How I miss you so much
It kills me inside sometimes to think
Tears start to come so I don't blink
It gets easier though knowing I'll be closer soon
Knowing not much longer- I'll be able to see you at noon
Or midnight, or 6 am, even, whenever we choose,
We'll have each other, ourselves to amuse...
What fun it will be to have you so close
To touch you, to hold you- I've missed you so much
No matter what they say we have as a diagnosis
I think we'll be fine because together we are stronger and such
Let's keep our thoughts clear- our emotions at bay
Let's do what we must until it's our time to sway...
A contest entry
- ~The Special Month of February~ by Sweetangelgrace.
800 points, ended February 6, 2008, 15 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - LOVE IS IN THE AIR.......LET YOUR LOVE HEART SHINE! BIG POINTS!!!!! by ears2hearyou.
1200 points, ended April 11, 2008, 19 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
To Mushy?
Comments
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Bravo Bravo Bravo!! This was just amazing.. I really really enjoyed this..And the fact that it rhymes so
well makes it a fun read..
I couldn't help but smile when I was done reading this.. Great write and good luck..
Peace to you, Jetleena
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actually it was fun to read...as a poet too..
I was amazed that you could find all the rhyming words
to use! I know how that can twist our brains!
Other poets have advised to me to touch the poem with
rhyme but not overwhelm it...sometimes the rhyme took
away from the message and flow...but honestly...i loved
your poem and thought you cleverly wrote it!
and yes...how the heart does ache when we miss our true
loves!
ears/Seattle great entry for this contest, thankyou
kindly for your entry!
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I know how this feels too. The first time I saw Steven was nerve wracking and I was so afraid of this afraid of that... but just a beautiful vibe came between us and it was just...right, you know?
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Astounding!
I am sure there is many feeling the same...I can relate this
Your poem speaks to me from a place that I know too well. it is sweet and sad all at the same time.
Waiting can be the beginning of something beautiful, and you seem to understand the possibilities of such bliss.
your a wonderful poet, excellent job!
Goodluck!
~~Grace~~
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Thanks so much for your uplifting comment. The person I talk about in this poem and I just recently met in Dec, and then I just got back last week from being there again to visit him for another week also. We are both diagnosed with schizophrenia. Makes a relationship hard, but we are taking it slow. I may move there in a few months. Not sure how much of that you got from the poem, but I'm just so happy and excited I want to tell everyone, lol... sorry. Thanks again.
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I have fallen in love with someone THOUSAND miles away and cannot wait to finally be held by him in person:-$.....
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Oh I know how you must feel then. Did the two of you meet online like we did? We talked, IMed, emailed, etc for a long time before we ever met. So then when we met it was like meeting someone I already knew. It was amazing. I wish you luck and love and all the happiness in the world.
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not too mushey at all!
Loved your feeling. no poem could ever be too lovey and mushet. don't ever to listen to anyone if they tell you that. feeling makes a poem more realistic and lifelike. LOVED IT!!!
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