Liquid gold lanterns
Illuminating the inkstained night
Dimming the stars
Reflecting the love in your eyes.
Tesoro
Our ride through the city
the boat carried on with the river
your touch, kiss
I take flight to the heavens
Amore
Enveloped in history,
conjoined in the depth of our love
Oblivious to tomorrow
eternal bliss in this moment.
Ti amo
Author notes
Option # 1
Ti amo, re mio.
A contest entry
- 140th Contest by Tarja.
450 points, ended January 7, 2008, 14 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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This, to me, is an accomplished and sophisticated piece of poetry. Unlike our hostess, I think the imagery is more than adequate for a relatively short poem of this nature--sometimes one can strive to include imagery for imagery's sake, and therefore over-egg the poetic pudding. Your poem is not guilty of this--it is well-balanced and imaginitively true.
Bill
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Aww this was very sweet. I am not a huge fan of the free verse style. But this works well. I think it could probably use a bit more imagery... I can't quite see what you see you know? Overall it is lovely though! Thank you for entering and good luck.
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