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[ She is dancing alone in the cold, ]

She is dancing alone in the cold,
dancing as if he was there,
dancing alone but together with him,
an immobile ballet in her mind.

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I'm using #1. And no, I don't expect you to like this.

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  • Tarja
    January 4, 2008
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    Yeah not so much... sorry... I just think that this needs a whole LOT more to become anything... there was no time for me to get into this... add more personality, more imagery... ANYTHING really... just four lines can't cut it hon! Thank you for following directions though.