"Add reality to your dreams,
listen......hear them scream"
The voices, visions and ideas,
play like movies in my head.
Burning desire runs so deep,
they simply have to be fed.
"Murder, maim and kill,
easily overpower their will"
Cold icy glint of steel sparks,
terror and fear in their eyes.
As realization begins to sink in,
it is time for them to die.
"Shimmering, razors edge does glow,
let the vital fluids ebb and flow"
Wanton butchery stimulates and excites,
Impulse drives me to cause great pain.
Pumping like pulsating hearts,
struggling when veins begins to drain.
"Slice and dice into ebony nights,
boil them slowly in horror and fright"
Delicate skin cuts like a knife and butter,
revealing inside, delights snug and warm.
A glorious feast, fit for a king,
soon will be my time to transform.
"Innards, juicy and sweet,
a delicious sumptuous treat"
I'm craving more and more each day,
fresh blood, food, hate and pain.
So come on, tell me straight doc,
have I gone completely insane?
"Let go of all your wrath,
it will set you on my path"
Lock me up, throw away the key,
I'm telling you it matters not.
As long as I have breath in me,
I lack the strength, the will to stop.
"Son you are doing so very well,
open your arms, embrace my hell"
Author notes
Prompt; 1] a madman/woman visiting his psychologist/psychiatrist:
The bits in the "" are the voices he hears. He is a serial killer.
A contest entry
- Inside the Mind of Madness by Synthetic-Nightmare.
1500 points, ended January 25, 2008, 34 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - ☼ Crime & Insanity ☼ by xxRainbowDawnxx.
900 points, ended January 12, 2008, 9 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Abnormal Social Behavior by Labefaction.
360 points, ended April 30, 2008, 22 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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For some reason, I guess because I'm twisted, this poem made me smile.
It is really good, as it gets the reader deep into the mind of the serial killer. Thank you.
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Wow, Awesome!!!
Love this...
Very dark & in the head...
Just taking a mo to bask in your darkness as I read it again...
Another great psychologically dark write you have here...
Good luck in the contest!
Well done!!!
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That was a VAST improvement. Not only did that improve the rhythm of the poem but it also allows the eye to move along more freely (by not stopping a familiar words). What did you think of it after the changes?
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Hehe I agree, I get the feeling this may have never been edited, my poems don't usually repeat words like this, but thank you so much for pointing it out, it reads a lot better now
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This was a good write, I liked the subject matter. Flow here is constantly interrupted and made it a little hard to read. I would suggest maybe thinning it out....removeing some "the's" usually works. Thank you for entering and good luck!
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I have taken your advice and removed a lot of the 'the's' from this piece, feel free to read again see if its smoother
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Please entering your name into the authors notes and tell me when you do/name of your poem.
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thank you for entering my contest, i liked the way you wrote this...great job
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This one is very eerie indeed. I love the way you have separate stanzas for the voice that's talking to him. That's one screwed up mind there, I could imagine a serial killers mind working this way (I read many crime novels, true crime books, criminal profiling books etc, so I have a rough idea).
Thanks so much for entering the contest! -
and i thought i was afraid of the dark...you are my new fear...great job
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wow seems that you are doing what comes natural to you in these dark writes, chilling the spine and sending the tingles ... good thing I love your work and know your heart is beautiful...or you could scare the bageebas out of me
love you ~Blessings always~ Trisha
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wow this was well DARK best of luck in contest great madman poem
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Madness
Hehehe...
You have definitely portrayed the Madness inside.
The voices inside his head urging him on to slaughter, I can imagine him sitting there talking away... Scaring the shit out of the SHRINK...LOL
Now where did I put that Jacket?
Great Stuff best of luck in the contest.
~T.S~
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Chilling!
You are becoming quite the mistress of the macabre! If I didn't also know you as the nice lady who wrote a cute poem about "rubbage" I might be worried about you. Excellent poem.
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Gulp and goosebumps!
Truly great work Mistress of Dark!!!
I love the inner evil voice saying wicked things... such a great idea the way you've written this... I LOVE it of course!!
(I agree with CherryOnTop... Wayne would be proud lol.)
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YAY!!!!!!!!!!
This is amazing, i love everything about it. Very chillingly REALISTIC!
HOT AS FUCK, THANKS FOR ENTERING
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OMG, this is the best poem that I have read in a long time. oh, I LOVE it so much. now this is really awesome. I told you have a great talent. I want to be able to write this kind of stuff, yours is so much better. remind me not to make this man angry or even be near him.. I like my innards right where they are.. inside of me..
good luck in all the contests that you entered.
kat
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JESUS CHRIST!!!!!THIS IS THE BEST ONE YET. You have created the ultimate masterpiece my friend!!!!Wayne will be so proud....I am serious this is awesome and really you are starting to scare me......
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