Satin gown worn in water's she wades
deep in the woods in rivers mystic haze
images of a lady playing forest charades
outline of her figure white water sprays.
Flown from the living in her talons flight
superstitions rippling legends of lore
tell of men lost in darkness of night
victims of shadowed spells bird songs gore.
Some say she's one of Achelous daughters,
three sirens, given birds bodies and wings,
who escaped from the Sirenum Scopuli waters,
Achelous was the God of rivers, to here he brings
river lady and her sirens song.
In a list
A contest entry
- River Lady (Image Inspired) by Idle Mind Wondering.
1500 points, ended January 12, 2008, 17 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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well done! I like the legend take, a siren running weary travelers ashore. this is a wonderful tale you have spun.
thank you.
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very good
so "odessus" of "the odessey"
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Excellent flow to this and your words are chosen like no-one else would know what to choose, so unique was this peice!
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What a beautifully written poem. The flow was just entrancing! Your words just amazing within this flow. It just made me feel like i was drifting away in a misty haze...
Amazing!
Keep at it!
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pretty song!
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Wonderful =)
I really enjoyed this, and I absolutely loved the opening verse. Cheers to a good write!
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Bravo! I love the mythology mixed in this beautiful piece of poetry.
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thank You ravensgift
I'm glad you enjoyed the read
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This is beautiful
What beautiful imagery and flow with nice rhythm. I enjoyed being there in the mystic river. Your poem is so alive it's like you are there with the Gods of the river. For your poem, Siren's Escape is a perfect title. Good luck in the contest you wrote a wonderful, beautiful poem of nature.
Blessings
Your AP sister
Kelle Marie
stavykm
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Oooh I love the lore within this piece. Wonderful rhythm and flow and superb rhyme. I love rhyme. Well done to the picture prompt. Best of luck in this contest. ~Pamela
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This is beautiful...but I wanted it not to end...all the same well done..good luck in the contest
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wow, really liked this one.. however... well.. the rhyme is really good.. but in the first stanza you rhyme the first line with the second, and third with fourth, but in the second and third stanzas you rhyme it through a line.. like first to third and second to fourth.. but maybe its not imp a bit, or maybe i understood it wrong?.i dont know.. its just something i thought i noticed. thank you so much, the poem is beautiful, and the picture too!i see a woman there ..Do you like mythology? i adore greek mythology. . . thank you -elena
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Thanks for your comment eleno
and your observation was noted, think I switched a couple lines to get the flow to read smoother and, to be honest, I forgot about the end line rhyme. Raises a viable question that leaves me curious as to whether a change in the pattern of rhyme in different stanza's is considered incorrect or not? Thanks for your comment, Im glad you enjoyed the read.
Best Regard
David
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wow / do like this one / nice write / Storm
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I like how you bring both the mythology and nature to life with this. The images you paint are truly marvelous. Good job!
~ Kit
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great :)
it was very pretty and has wonderful flow.
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thank you I loveeCookies
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very good
enjoyable read
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I am taken back to the movie Sirens that was made up in the Blue Mts in all the beauty of natural settings i have a vision of 'Elle' running naked through the forest. I see your words and lines as clearly beautifully calling to come and get lost inside to run free. You do paint well the artist of words Good luck in the contest.
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Excellent!
Love the diversity of your poems..and this wonder of this woman, and how you have created her and the story is most intriguing....A lovely write...and do keep it up. You are gifted as you know!...The poem creates such a mystic wonder!
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Lady Dragonwyck
You are very kind and I appreciate your reading my poems. I have noticed your comments for some time on several of my poems and I want you to know I have noticed your attention to making comments and I thank you for your time, I enjoy hearing from you and I really do plan on reading some of your work as well
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Thank You Rose
You always have such kind observations I appreciate your critique
Your Brother,
David
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You have beautifully captured the picture. Very very well written and descriptive. Love this style and poetry writes. Good luck in the contest.
Lady Dragonwyck
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I do love your nature poems, you always take my head to a whole new dimension, superb as always hun, I am so happy to see you back and writing so much sweets... bravo
Karen
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