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Child of the Moon

A child of the moon,
I pay tribute to its light;
The sun comes up too soon,
hallowed be the night.

A lunatic no doubt,
in the heart of the quiet black;
I start to sing and shout,
and the animals answer back.

As Venus nestles neatly,
in the lap of a bright crescent moon;
The chorus of the night sings sweetly,
with its captivating croon.

Our nocturnal symphony,
performs nightly for the free;
The insects, beasts, and me,
all sing in harmony.

A child of the moon,
jams along with all his friends;
Each of us in tune,
'til sunlight spells the end.

Author notes

for Warren Zevon....

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  • Asdzaa Nadleehe silver member
    August 30
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    Excellent imagery...
    Many blessings
    ~A~

  • Michael P
    August 17
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    very lyrical-Zevon would have loved it-peace


  • BabyBun silver member
    May 29

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    I just wish I could write with such finesse. From the title to the last word, you captivated me with this wonderful piece - one of my all time favourites - I feel so luck to have read it.

  • How enchanting!! A feeling of the mystical in this.. I love the thought of all singing in harmony under mother moon!!
    Fabulous!

  • Lady Mak
    May 19
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    WoW! you are some poet!

    You are one terrific writer! I loved it.


  • zhanis wolf
    April 23
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    coolio! Beautiful piece. I know the feeling that moon can have espeially on a nice night where all the animals are running about. great job.
  • ecrivain01 silver member
    March 23

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    Very nice ...

    It seems to flow perfectly. I can't see anything here that you could, or should, change. Good job.


  • Dalaney gold member
    March 23
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    Very good.

    Love, Lane

  • Kappa
    March 21

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    love it!

    I love the rhythmic rhyme, so much more then some of mine, I mean mine rhyme mostly bye being the same if you know what I mean, while yours are just soundign the same, I think that's a much harder skill. Are u by chance teaching a class?


  • mysticstorm gold member
    February 19

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    How amazing! I love Warren Zevon, always have...so much controversy in his songs...I am a moon child for sure and know how wonderful it is...Great lyrics with rhythm and flow...very nice to read.
    Thank you for sharing!


  • pania gold member
    February 19

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    From another Moon Child - great! Rhyme and rhythm captivate - until the fourth stanza, which insists on its own integrity quite strongly, is this because we are free? Croon on, I'll jam along.

    . Rewarded 4


  • SandyToo
    February 19

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    AH-OOOOOOH!

    From one lunatic to another: I loved it, of course! (Excellent revisions, by the way.) Did ye hear me howl? C'mon now, croon with me some more. The sun has yet to shine.

    Fantastic imagery! I was right there with you, and boy, oh boy! What a delightfully captivating bit of fun!

    ...And all with such a plethora of perfectly pleasing plebian phrases.

    You are truly an amazing poet, my friend. Bravo!

  • ocerus
    February 19

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    different. i thought that the vocabulary was a bit plebian, but there is peace here. not bad. - ocerus

  • Tony El Great silver member
    February 17

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    That was just cool, and the flow was great. I was once fond of the night, but alas the years have made me a day person; that's not such a bad thing (LOL).


  • Perception silver member
    February 17
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    I really like the flow to this one... It is beautiful...

  • Kiran silver member
    February 11
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    This is an amazing poem, written with great imagery. A captivating piece, I loved this.


  • AmazinJason
    February 7
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    yay

    I like it.


  • zhanis wolf
    February 4

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    I love this piece; especially the last stanza. You definitely have a way with words. Keep jammin til the sunlight peeks her head up over the hills, my friend.


  • dreamweaver08
    February 2
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    this is awesome. i love your style and creativity.

  • Morrigan Trinity
    January 27
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    I love this. It reminds me of the relationship between the Moon Goddess and Her children, though I don't know if you meant it this way.
    I giggled at the refrence to "lunatic" because of the lunar affects on sanity (documented in the early 1900s, but assumed long before that time).

    . Rewarded 6

  • mcheadle
    January 26

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    I like this it is very cute and can mane a smile apprea if one thinks back to their younger years

    If you keep this kind of writtting up you will soon having us reading out ou your palm. Really a very nice piece , rythem was good and the imagation was doing fine...mac

    . Rewarded 4


  • beryl
    January 26
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    Beautful piece, you capture the essence of a night watcher perfectly, short.. but sweet.

  • mmook
    January 26

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    nice works ...the imagery and flow is excellence but i especially like the rhyme...thanks for sharing ..Well done

    . Rewarded 4


  • Perception silver member
    January 25

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    I like how all the stanzas flow into each other, and they keep the same idea. Your rhyme is really good, and enjoyable.

    Great write

  • Dalaney gold member
    January 25

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    I have just started to write
    a few rhymes - this inspires me
    to keep on trying. How enchanting
    your words are, Poet. Love, Lane


  • Ruby34
    January 13
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    What a wonderful poem..very creative..I loved your title..
    As Venus nestles neatly,
    in the lap of a bright crescent moon;
    The chorus of the night sings sweetly,
    with its captivating croon.

    Wow my friend, great imagery..the picture you painted with your words is beautiful indeed. Good job!
    Amarige


  • Pisces Pieces silver member
    January 13

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    You know what drives me crazy? Well, let me tell you I'll be reading a piece and really want to exclaim in my comment, how it made me feel while reading it, and I never seem able to quite do so. And so I feel like I always say the same thing.

    This has such great imagery and appeals to all the senses, I love the unique creativity of the concepts you have portrayed and can clearly envision it. It paints a picture of a quiet forest, for me...when your definition of 'quiet' is the magnificent sounds of nature

    Enough rambling for now! Wonderful write!

    ~Michele


  • CaliOkie silver member
    January 11
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    I'm running out of exclamations

    I always enjoy reading your work. You demonstrate an effortless mastery of the language. Your structure and rhythm are excellent, as is your rhyming pattern. You do a good job of giving your poems a lyric quality without them becoming "sing-songy" (if there is such a word, if not I just made it up).

    Keep writing 'em, I'll keep reading 'em.

    CaliOkie


  • TillyMay
    January 7
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    This has a wonderful rhythm and a natural sort of flow- not unlike nature and the cylces of the moon. It is clever (love the lunatic bit) and your vocabulary is wonderful (careful, your intellect is showing!) This is a fantastic poem- and one I shall revisit.
    Cheers!


  • Talking Toni gold member
    January 6
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    Very NIce!!!!

    Your words really painted a beautiful imagery here and I was hooked throughout the entire read!!! Great talent you have here and I love the way we all come in tune with nature as you so eloquetly state in this piece of fine poetry!!! Thanks for sharing and again I was quite an enjoyabe write!!!~~Toni~~


  • Lady Ireland gold member
    January 5

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    Very interesting piece Mat.
    Happy new year ma Chara!
    I liked it very much and think that the flow was smooth and easy to read. great work.
    Slán Dolores. x

  • impressive

    Oh, this one...is very very very dreamy... Really love it...I wish I could have your talent!

  • Eusebius
    January 4

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    bravo

    Oh, I think this is quite excellent all around! (my only quibble is with 4th stanza where the rhyme scheme inexplicably changes...but that is easy enough to fix.) bravo... bravo...

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