A child of the moon,
I pay tribute to its light;
The sun comes up too soon,
hallowed be the night.
A lunatic no doubt,
in the heart of the quiet black;
I start to sing and shout,
and the animals answer back.
As Venus nestles neatly,
in the lap of a bright crescent moon;
The chorus of the night sings sweetly,
with its captivating croon.
Our nocturnal symphony,
performs nightly for the free;
The insects, beasts, and me,
all sing in harmony.
A child of the moon,
jams along with all his friends;
Each of us in tune,
'til sunlight spells the end.
Author notes
for Warren Zevon....
Feel free to comment..and please read my other work..
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Excellent imagery...
Many blessings
~A~
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very lyrical-Zevon would have loved it-peace
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I just wish I could write with such finesse. From the title to the last word, you captivated me with this wonderful piece - one of my all time favourites - I feel so luck to have read it.
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How enchanting!! A feeling of the mystical in this.. I love the thought of all singing in harmony under mother moon!!
Fabulous!
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WoW! you are some poet!
You are one terrific writer! I loved it.
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coolio! Beautiful piece. I know the feeling that moon can have espeially on a nice night where all the animals are running about. great job.
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Very nice ...
It seems to flow perfectly. I can't see anything here that you could, or should, change. Good job.
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Very good.
Love, Lane -
love it!
I love the rhythmic rhyme, so much more then some of mine, I mean mine rhyme mostly bye being the same if you know what I mean, while yours are just soundign the same, I think that's a much harder skill. Are u by chance teaching a class?
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How amazing! I love Warren Zevon, always have...so much controversy in his songs...I am a moon child for sure and know how wonderful it is...Great lyrics with rhythm and flow...very nice to read.
Thank you for sharing!
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From another Moon Child - great! Rhyme and rhythm captivate - until the fourth stanza, which insists on its own integrity quite strongly, is this because we are free? Croon on, I'll jam along.
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AH-OOOOOOH!
From one lunatic to another: I loved it, of course! (Excellent revisions, by the way.) Did ye hear me howl? C'mon now, croon with me some more. The sun has yet to shine.
Fantastic imagery! I was right there with you, and boy, oh boy! What a delightfully captivating bit of fun!
...And all with such a plethora of perfectly pleasing plebian phrases.
You are truly an amazing poet, my friend. Bravo!
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different. i thought that the vocabulary was a bit plebian, but there is peace here. not bad. - ocerus
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That was just cool, and the flow was great. I was once fond of the night, but alas the years have made me a day person; that's not such a bad thing (LOL).
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I really like the flow to this one... It is beautiful...
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This is an amazing poem, written with great imagery. A captivating piece, I loved this.
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yay
I like it.
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I love this piece; especially the last stanza. You definitely have a way with words. Keep jammin til the sunlight peeks her head up over the hills, my friend.
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this is awesome. i love your style and creativity.
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I love this. It reminds me of the relationship between the Moon Goddess and Her children, though I don't know if you meant it this way.
I giggled at the refrence to "lunatic" because of the lunar affects on sanity (documented in the early 1900s, but assumed long before that time).
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I like this it is very cute and can mane a smile apprea if one thinks back to their younger years
If you keep this kind of writtting up you will soon having us reading out ou your palm. Really a very nice piece , rythem was good and the imagation was doing fine...mac
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Beautful piece, you capture the essence of a night watcher perfectly, short.. but sweet.
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nice works ...the imagery and flow is excellence but i especially like the rhyme...thanks for sharing ..Well done
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I like how all the stanzas flow into each other, and they keep the same idea. Your rhyme is really good, and enjoyable.
Great write
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I have just started to write
a few rhymes - this inspires me
to keep on trying. How enchanting
your words are, Poet. Love, Lane
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What a wonderful poem..very creative..I loved your title..
As Venus nestles neatly,
in the lap of a bright crescent moon;
The chorus of the night sings sweetly,
with its captivating croon.
Wow my friend, great imagery..the picture you painted with your words is beautiful indeed. Good job!
Amarige
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You know what drives me crazy? Well, let me tell you I'll be reading a piece and really want to exclaim in my comment, how it made me feel while reading it, and I never seem able to quite do so. And so I feel like I always say the same thing.
This has such great imagery and appeals to all the senses, I love the unique creativity of the concepts you have portrayed and can clearly envision it. It paints a picture of a quiet forest, for me...when your definition of 'quiet' is the magnificent sounds of nature
Enough rambling for now! Wonderful write!
~Michele
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I'm running out of exclamations
I always enjoy reading your work. You demonstrate an effortless mastery of the language. Your structure and rhythm are excellent, as is your rhyming pattern. You do a good job of giving your poems a lyric quality without them becoming "sing-songy" (if there is such a word, if not I just made it up).
Keep writing 'em, I'll keep reading 'em.
CaliOkie
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This has a wonderful rhythm and a natural sort of flow- not unlike nature and the cylces of the moon. It is clever (love the lunatic bit) and your vocabulary is wonderful (careful, your intellect is showing!) This is a fantastic poem- and one I shall revisit.
Cheers!
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Very NIce!!!!
Your words really painted a beautiful imagery here and I was hooked throughout the entire read!!! Great talent you have here and I love the way we all come in tune with nature as you so eloquetly state in this piece of fine poetry!!! Thanks for sharing and again I was quite an enjoyabe write!!!~~Toni~~
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Very interesting piece Mat.
Happy new year ma Chara!
I liked it very much and think that the flow was smooth and easy to read. great work.
Slán Dolores. x
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impressive
Oh, this one...is very very very dreamy...
Really love it...I wish I could have your talent!
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bravo
Oh, I think this is quite excellent all around! (my only quibble is with 4th stanza where the rhyme scheme inexplicably changes...but that is easy enough to fix.) bravo... bravo...
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