Forever my love
I hold you most dear;
You always come back
To be with me here.
The love we loved
In dark ages past,
A love once lost,
Will return at last.
Though in this life
It’s been found too late,
We will meet again –
We are bound by fate.
We will find each other
As we did before –
And in a life to come
We will love once more,
That in that time
And in times to come,
Our two souls
Will become as one
And so be together
Throughout all time –
I’ll forever be yours,
You’ll always be mine.
When our time is over
And done at last;
When the love that we loved
Has finally passed;
When the world has come
And then gone away,
As we stand together
On that very last day –
Then only our souls
Will live on without end –
My soul mate forever,
My lover, my friend.
Author notes
Altair is my star, Taurus is my constellation.
A contest entry
- Make me cry =] [p/w allowed] by LeilaJayne.
500 points, ended May 10, 2008, 28 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - truth and dare (ie poetry is so much more than just poetic devices) by Dienush.
600 points, ended May 18, 2008, 30 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Past life echo's by Draig aine.
1150 points, ended January 5, 22 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Well, so much for cheese! Someone obviously thought this poem worthy of a shiny gold trophy, and even though rhyme is not my thing, I kinda like this. Early stuff does tend to be very intricate, dense and formal, written in conventional metrics with the end rhyme being the focus. Personally, in my later poems I've learned to depend on a simplicity that seems almost nonpoetic on the surface, but has (I hope) reverberations within that keep it intense and alive. I can see that in your work, too.
So long as you keep writing, it matters not what it is you write ~ me
~c♥
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oh this one tugged at my heart
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Hey, his again. It really is the sweetest thing.
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Sweet.
Huh. Not so much vomitting here- well, not related lol. Infact, it's very tender and there's nothing wrong with the odd bit of soppy sentiment. Touchingly sweet- enough to make anyone sound as if they're distracted by a hand-sized puppy.
It's interesting to read one of your first. I suppose it's a good way to start and shows why flow is NEVER a problem with you, you got that right. This flows like warm blood. My first poems read like having splinters shoved under your toe nails or slowly dying from the various effects of drinking a couple of cups of salt after starving.
Congrats on the old gold, my friend. You once said your old writes were awful, I see nothing wrong with them, just a change of style to the more textured
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Wow, your first/second poem? It's always nice to see how a poet started out. I'm not particularly fond of rhyming, though here it kind of suits the light message you're sending out. I like the love and optimism in this, I could use some of those
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Thanks very much for entering this into my contest, and congratulations on your trophy. Absolutely love this =] xx
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Well this is just lovely and romantic! I love the thoughts in here... true soul mates bound through eternity.
Flowed beautifully.. and I found myself being taken away on a sweet ride!
Loved it!
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Deep, tender, spiritual. You again make me hold onto hope that true love does indeed exist, and is not merely fairy tale fodder. Your talent is awe inspiring, so consider me inspired, and awed.
Blessed be,
Billie Jean
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inspiring...
Beautiful poem. I never really know what to say here.. I don't feel like I'm in an position to review anyone's work..but when I read something that moves me.. deep inside... I feel the need to write something... This is one of those poems. Moving.. inspiring.. sad at the loss of time but honoring the knowledge of the never ending..
~d
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You know...
I usually hate rhyme, love poems, and anything that may be regarded as sappy - but I absolutely adore this!
As far as I'm concerned, you are the Shakespeare of this century! I hope to read many more like this, for it made me smile (even if ruefully).
Excellent poem (of course by now I expect nothing less from you).
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Welcome to AllPoetry
Beautifully penned with graceful flow and imagery
Best of luck in the contest
Enjoy AllPoetry
Stay safe
~Manda
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The words speak of loss, they spell out sad emotions, but in the same way they speak with happiness. If the words speak truth I hope that one day you will find your love again. Good write and good luck in my contest.
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