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Dream to Life

I lay down my head,
retiring after a long day.
I fall into my own mind,
Bringing forth memories, thoughts and wishes,
As I see each of these they are drempt to life.
I see my dearest wish and my darkest regret,
Mingling with my conciousness.

As I continue to delve into my own mind,

New thoughts spring forth and are drempt to life.

Words, actions are replayed in the midst of memories and thoughts,

Turning my dreams into a jumbled mess.

I find an odd peace in the chaotic whirlpool that is my mind.

As I finally reach the bottommost part of my mind. I awake.

As i proceed with the worldly pursuits of any mortal,

I eagerly await my return to the dreamworld's peace.

Author notes

BOOYAH!! THIS ONE'S GETTING PUBLISHED!!!

A contest entry

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  • HeavensDaughter
    March 12, 2008

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    Very interesting. I relate to a lot of what you wrote here. I like the imagery of the mixing of reality and dream life.

    Good write!


  • PatheticKt
    January 11, 2008
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    you don't need any help here, i mean, the piece totally caught my interest O.O i could relate to this and this line was simply awesome:

    "i find an odd peace in the chaotic whirlpool that is my mind."

    i'm glad there are some people here in AP that thinks it's soothing to think deeply about things about life. good and bad, whatever. great piece, i say ^_^


  • TexasTUK
    January 10, 2008

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    This is an excellent start, you use some interesting imagery, which is always a winner in my books =P

    Try playing around with form, metaphor and perspective (I, you, He).


    xx
    Taylor


  • Metaphorist
    January 10, 2008

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    I really don't have any criticisms for this piece. I think it is very good especially if you're new to writing. The only problem I saw was a typo on line 5- "drempt" should be "dreamt". Keep it up!


  • RedwingSpirit silver member
    January 6, 2008
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    This is really nice you are very talented keep it up I think you are fifteen though so I may not keep this in the contest. But I will start one real soon for 15-19
    ages probably this evening You can enter it there tonight or tomorrow.

    RedwingSpirit

  • ecrivain01
    January 6, 2008

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    Nice poem ...

    but unfortunately, it can't win here. There are far too many good poems already entered. I see you've entered other contests, and wish you luck with them.


  • Black Rose Reaper
    January 3, 2008

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    you wish you were lost in dream world as do i dreaming is the only place were anything can happen this poem made me happy good job

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