I sit alone in my room and cry,
wondering,
what made you, say goodbye,
words, like molten metal Pierce my brain.
Trying to make sense,
then repeating again.
The tired old cop out,
"its not you its me!"
"you need room to grow,
why can't you see?"
"I'm holding you back,
you deserve a life!
"I'm not worthy;
nor capable;
of being you're wife!
Then you were gone from the doorway,
not even a sigh !
no thought to what I want!
I wanted to try.
Fostering a child?
A viable option!
HELL :
Given enough time we could have gone for adoption.
Its not you're fault.
Its genetics.
We cant have kids of our own,
Instead of facing it together!
we are now both alone.
I sit alone in my room,
you're words now but a token.
No hope left in my heart,
its finally fucking broken.
Author notes
A personal rant
A contest entry
- Make me cry =] [p/w allowed] by LeilaJayne.
500 points, ended May 10, 2008, 28 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Vent your Frustrations. by Loki.
700 points, ended March 1, 9 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Ouch.
As a recent divorcee because of a similar situation, this poem was like a brutal slap in the face. Odd, because based on my initial reaction to the font color and the background, I expected something completely different. This gives a nice perspective, and, I'll admit, one that I have not often considered, being female.
The frustration was tangible and painful to experience but this poem fit this contest. It expresses exactly what we were after.
Nicely done. Thank you for your entry and good luck in the contest! -
The ending of this was like a bullet. That one line is the most powerful in the piece. The rhyme and wording was well done, and the poem read easily. I liked the topic, as I have been in a similar one. Thank you for sharing this rant and best of luck in the contest.
-Løki
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I enjoyed your poem. I haven't read a poem on this particular subject yet and I like how you worded it. It is a nice piece. I am glad you shared.
<3 Tia & Tasha -
heart wrenching
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