Rain falls silenty upon onlookers
and crashes onto me.
I drown in the silence...
that my life used to be.
Now it is loud:
boisterous and awkard.
The people look over my head
as I still move onward
in the cold and the wet
and the cruel and the brittle;
I stand alone on my own:
in the rain I am invisable.
My figure is blurred
and my fave is riot.
So desperately and wait
and long for my quiet.
They're talking too much.
I can hear them whisper still.
They rush and hurry around me
they insult me and my will.
Grey and unseen,
I now look to you:
my love-attraction that I can see...
but can you see me, too?
Or are you an onlooker...
a part of all the rest.
A part of life that ignores me
and does not bother protest.
Still I wait here.
In the raining area that is my prison cell...
I smile faintly and blow a kiss to you
and when you find a different lover, I wish you well
Author notes
*stand in the rain
*i'm still here
A contest entry
- options by burdenbytruth.
600 points, ended January 23, 2008, 26 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - (clever but saddening title goes here) by Bleeding On Paper.
500 points, ended January 12, 2008, 12 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Comments
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I know exactly how this feels; you describe it well. Many years has this feeling dragged through time, relentless drops of rain that fall like shards of ice, raining on and cutting through the soul. One day, those wounds will be healed.....great work!
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amazing
wow i love this poem its simply amazing. the sadness is evident and the pain is there i love the way it is put together and how well it seems to flow everyline seems to feed into the other great job
this is my favorite part
"I stand alone on my own:
in the rain I am invisable."
i love this because it is a mazing imagery and i can definetly relate to it because latley i seem to feel all on my own and like nothing i do can ever seem to get me noticed i feel like i am a burden and i love this poem and how i can definetly relate to it
good luck!
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