I am the moment just waiting for you,
keeping a light touch on your skin.
I leave the feeling of ice coolness on your skin,
but warm it the instance of realization.
I stand still inside of your heart,
chilling your skin when the person walks past.
But the melting core of momentary lapse,
that is the final concentration of happiness.
I keep your dream alive with any second,
just a glance towards the soul of an angel.
She can break your heart or make it grow,
the moment granted to the beautiful or plain.
I know the moment you wish would last,
but the stampeade of the heart is enough.
It will come back time and time again,
but it will close a gap between the reality or false.
That is my moment.
A contest entry
- Momentary by Keyser Soze.
1200 points, ended January 18, 2008, 16 entries
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Comments
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A very heartfelt moment.
The idea of leaving the 'feeling of ice coldness' on the skin is impeccable.
Nice work.
Whiile you didn't become this moment you presented it nicely.
Thank you for your entry. -
The first two stanzas could really stand alone. The images of hot and cold in them are beautiful though I would consider changing stanza one so the phrase "on your skin" isn't repeated. The second half is good, but diverted away from the prompt too much.
Best of luck in the contest.
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