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Shall I?

 

'Old whiskey shots and candle light

shall I paint the picture more clear?

company is on its way, ...and

my heart pounds harder as she draws near.

Gentle kisses start to ''Become rough"

while her smiles still hold fast

with that deep gleam in her eye again

I knew those wicked spells she could cast!

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Shall I paint you a picture more clear friend

or has this one seemed to fill your mind?

When she arrives at my door tonight

the rest of my world will all be left behind.

For now it's ~Whiskey shots and candle light

with a "Certain quietness" that instills this place

and I shall now paint you a beautiful picture

of this women that fell from grace

 

 

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  • Disturbed Prodigy
    October 2, 2008

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    a poem that strongly inspires on to take the pen up again, this is something golden, keep it flowing


  • Arizona Sunset
    February 3, 2008
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    love your background, and loved your imagery in this poem blessings always~ Trisha~


  • Amunet Wolfbane Moderators member
    February 3, 2008

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    Loved this from the first line, very smooth and it is always a great thing when a poem speaks volumes in few words. Great job penning this one and best of luck to you.


  • Heavenly Angel silver member
    January 14, 2008

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    Very well done, my friend
    I liked this one a lot; to me, it had a mysterious air about it and that always makes for great poetry
    Wishing you the best of luck in this contest!


  • Asdzaa Nadleehe
    January 14, 2008

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    Sensual imagery...I will of course need to see the photo so that I can get the full effect for this piece...
    A beautiful write..
    Best wishes with this entry...
    Peace and many blessings
    ~A~


  • grannyeri gold member
    January 14, 2008
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    Have seen this picture before, so thought I had read it, but it was another entry a while ago. Liked your take on this picture and title prompt. Think you meant gleam, and certain. Not sure why periods were left out at end of lines when other punctuation was used. Just wondering. Like the background used for this too - very rich and classy.


  • B Chandler
    January 14, 2008
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    im gonna have to bookmark this and re-read again lol

  • Ir.muse
    January 3, 2008

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    hello dear uncle,

    Ok, I'm not going to read it.
    Just dropped by to say:
    Happy New Year.

    Shahrzad

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