Dinner and movies
pay for you like three quarters
placed on a counter.
Picked from plenty of choices
like white chocolate
with cookies and cream
to coated mint gels
or bars full of caramel,
nougat, nuts, and such;
you are not a meal,
just a snack between weekends
and the grind from 9 to 5—
something to tide me over
because it’ll be a while
before I will sit again.
Tonight’s not promised
so tomorrow shouldn’t be
thought about at all—
just this moment between us,
this moment right now
when you’re simply devoured—
not even savored,
not like the first bites taken
with a childlike giddiness
many moons ago.
You’re that familiar taste;
that remembered sensation,
unmemorable this time,
just meeting a need.
Eventually,
the memories may haunt me
like unwanted calories
but none exists now—
even if I spoil your
appetite as well…
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excellent
very good, I really like the last part!!
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LOL Thanks sis! I think that flew over many heads. LUBS YA!
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Wow... lol this is brilliant.
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Oooh...candy
another fascinating piece dear.
Love your flow, here. Great imagery and thanks for sharing the fantasy.
Ephiphany
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Oh my, the first stanza speaks of the fiscal price apportioned towards fast-food-fun with the opposite sex and that's exactly what is wrong with these encounters, the girl asked on a date, wined and dined, thinking it may be the start of something meaningful and in actuality the guy is merely feeding his twin appetites, the need to feed his belly and feed his sexual appetite. No wonder these encounters leave everyone unfulfilled and it's rare that guys admit to this cavalier way of treating women in their desire to only desire lust.
Well written
One
Yvette
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I would rather savor the flava lol
You amaze me with how deeply you can write about such simplistic things!
peace and love
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Are You? and this Candy Bar.......Dating.
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Thanks a lot, bro. Actually, I jsut wanted some Kit Kat. Didn't even Kiss her. LOL
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This struck me as very sad, and very real. People become fungible and totally forgettable, the barely connecting, that empty feeling... Very strong write here.
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This is what most people won't admit. The brutal honesty of the "game". This was well written to the subject. The other "never spoken" truth is most of these folks really want a real relationship more than anyone. The fascad is to pretend you don't care to hide how much you do.
The worse thing than being lonely is being alone so I guess if you can't get the love you want, you pretend with the one your with, temporary relationships that don't require depth or exposure. Too bad the thing they are seeking isn't that shallow or casual, but I guess you have to get sick and tired of being sick and tired to take the plunge and open the door to your heart.
So many wounded, so little time. Touch them FATHER.
One Love,
John
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Thank you, brother. Hope no one misses the last few lines (one thing I always tell my sisters is EVERYTHING works both ways. As a child, when the asked why didn't I put the toilet seat back down, I asked why didn't they put it back up! LOL)
God bless, brother.
DEZ
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I'm aware guys and some women take tender feelings for granted as you've said in this.More a routine measure of life's momentary nessesity. Yet know all too well how this can hurt the unknowing tender heart too. This piece does and has always been the case more times than not throughout our history. Again, your verse expresses the real and grit side of life poetically.In some ways may be an enlightening explaination to a few left wondering. That no real harm was intended, nor was any love.
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Oh my...this is naughty! There is a sinister edge to this. It's like you get all you want and she gets; "dinner and a movie". Wow! Dez! Could you possibly be more sarcastic!
"you are not a meal,
just a snack between weekends
and the grind from 9 to 5—
something to tide me over"
Wonder if she knows her true worth or is that exactly what you aim to show her. Hope she comes to know that she could be all of that and a bag of chips if that's what she wished. This has far too many layers for me to get into in one sitting. So, maybe I'll return to digest a little more after I've had my dessert. Ouch!
Love Ya ♥
Renee
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