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Love Like Death

Naive was I to think we could survive
With no rest for the wicked I watched you sleep
You were lying there barely alive
As my soul silently began to weep

My corpse is waiting here for you
So you can take it away from the dark
And although I may already be doomed
My heart will forever live bearing your mark

Alone in pain is all I have ever known
So now I dance on the memories of old
Your sweet caress I have made my home
You are my love like death
Until my flesh grows cold

I know that your kiss cuts through my tears
And that your touch makes me breathe
But I still writhe under my oldest fears
The ones that cannot ever leave

But in this sliver of hope I wait patiently
For you to return even for one last time
In this massacre you will set me free
And to heaven together we will climb

Alone in pain is all I have ever known
So now I dance on the memories of old
Your sweet caress I have made my home
You are my love like death
Until my flesh grows cold

My love like death is all I need
So perfectly you chain me to your heart
My love like death will never mislead
Together forever we can never be apart
My love like death

Alone in pain is all I have ever known
So now I dance on the memories of old
Your sweet caress I have made my home
You are my love like death
Until my flesh grows cold

Author notes

Dedicated to pete xxx
In an old leather dress and steel heeled shoes i dance on bones and wait for you.
You can break my heart but the heart shaped glasses you bought me will remain intact.

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  • pattyann4500
    July 6, 2008
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    Your heart must have been terribly broken. Thank you for your entry. Patricia


  • awaiting.deletion
    July 3, 2008

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    Hm, I suppose I like it...not exactly suiting to my tastes, but then, that doesn't really matter...nice job...


  • vaguelyfamiliar
    April 26, 2008

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    An ABAB rhyme scheme and a poem that uses words like "soul" and "sweet caress" were not what I was looking for in this contest.

    Thank you for your entry, in any case.


  • The Darkness
    March 25, 2008
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    wow vervy nice


  • leaveme
    March 12, 2008
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    Love it !!!

    This is amazing.


  • TabbyCat
    February 5, 2008

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    Chilling

    So dark, but I enjoyed it. Love can be like death...Tahnk you for entering my contest, and good luck!


  • Stormy Days
    January 23, 2008
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    this is very good
    amazing a mix of love and dark


  • GlassDecayAblaze
    January 13, 2008

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    Amazing

    I love this, it reminds me of how i used to feel, especially here: "Your sweet caress I have made my home
    " & "But in this sliver of hope I wait patiently
    For you to return even for one last time" & "So perfectly you chain me to your heart".

    The title ties in with the over all subject, the first line is a true beginning-starting at the start, and the last line is a definite closing statement.


  • irishmidnight
    January 10, 2008
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    God this is good!! Beautiful...tragic...stunning!! best of luck!!!


  • Anguas-Confusion gold member
    January 8, 2008

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    A song almost... a very good write, quite deep and the feeling of it being very dark but as if it has only just scratched the surface of something much deeper. very well written. Thank you very much for entering it. The best of luck to you. xXx


  • RedwingSpirit silver member
    January 7, 2008

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    This is very nice but your age says adult so I am going to have to remove Please give me an exclamation first before I do so. Are you 18 or older if 18 and younger
    Thank you for entering this into my contest I wish you the best of luck


    RedwingSpirit


  • Georgia La Mariposa
    January 7, 2008

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    Hey this was a beautifully dark and morbid write and I would be honoured if you would consider writing a piece for my contest Frightened Eyes and Candy Dream plenty of options, you have such divine potential I'd hate to see it go to waste


  • SixStringDebauchery
    January 6, 2008

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    I love you so much, thank you.
    Pete
    xxx
    P.S.:I'm so glad to see you righting again.
    Do some more! =D


  • Bleeding On Paper
    January 6, 2008
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    i love this very deep

    good job and goodluck


  • TheDemonEve
    January 3, 2008

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    How exquisite, this union of Love and Death. This is something subtle and altogether new in this contest. It is soul-shattering, and others entering in the future can take an example from you. Lovely piece, exquisitely well-written!!

    Best of luck and thanks for entering!

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