I went home last tonight to get some clothes, but didn’t stay
because it was
daddy’s day with our son.
I tripped on memories walking in the front door
and
fell onto my reality as I saw them sitting at the table eating pork chops and fish.
The house reeked of old times.
I was tempted to start doing dishes because I couldn’t stand
my favorite pan being stained with what
I was missing.
But it was daddy’s day.
I knew I would have tomorrow to dry sobbing dishes.
I would have all night to do laundry and fold loads of
sorrow.
I felt my emotions walk away
and
go sit on the empty seat beside them.
I heard sadness sneak up behind me and tear faith from every word I spoke.
It hurt
It hurt as much as it hurt my son to force down his last bite.
But tomorrow was mommy’s day again
I just had to wait
for
tomorrow……
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Comments
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Wow!
This is such a powerful piece of art! Your worf choices make the imagery and emotion smack you over the head like someone hitting it with a hammer. You are very talented. I will have to read more. Well Done! ~Peace~Gar -
Emotions
Your emotions pour out in this fine but sad piece of poetry. Sadly many experience this in their lifetime. As a father{ who paid 13 yrs of Child support without seeing my kids } I commend you for allowing your child that. Your pen is mighty
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You know, I'm just happy at the fact I can read a sad poem and not be able to relate. However, you tug many emotions that are simply indescribible (sp?)
It makes me [or any other reader for that matter] want to know the whole story, but you keep us aching for more - which is a good thing in this case.
by the way, you're beautiful
Never ♥
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Good job, I really like the perspective. I've never really seen something about missing the life they used to live after divorce. Terribly sad, thank you.
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Oh dear, this was dreadfully sad. I think this is one of those pieces that makes you want to cry but you can't tear your eyes away from and spare yourself the pain. Thank you for sharing this with me.
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Thank you for your kind words
-Layne
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'But it was daddy’s day.
I knew I would have tomorrow to dry sobbing dishes.
I would have all night to do laundry and fold loads of
sorrow.'
This was brilliant. You create and mold your words into such creative metaphors, it keeps me interested and on the edge of my toes, the whole way through. Great job on this, I loved it.
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sho!!! this is real pain and I might be mistaken by the details of your life for I doing a quick comment on the poetry, but it sounds like you felt left out for some reason and seems like you still love or do love your son's daddy so much. I pray that your son will have an eternal bond with you and respect you for the great mother you are. sounds to me like you sacrifice allot of your emotions for his happiness. I sallute you dear lady!!!
thank you so much for entering this contest! We wish you all the best.
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My sons father and I broke up a year ago, it was my decision. we are still trying to sell our home, so we alternate days so that my son never has to leave, its just a tough situation, a hard one. I just wanted to explain because I think you got the idea that I was pushed to the outside looking in.....All works out, life is never easy, thank you for reading!
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OMG.. that was amazing Layne! Very sad! So real! Great write... and loved the detail.
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"It hurt
It hurt as much as it hurt my son to force down his last bite.
But tomorrow was mommy’s day again
I just had to wait
for
tomorrow……"
*sigh* OMG, this is touching, honey...you are amazing.
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Thank you for your sweet words, and thank you for reading
-Layne
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You just pour your heart out on the page my sweet and my heart breaks with you.... it's not the most ideal situation for any of you, because it's so hard, but you do so well to keep it together for that little light of your life... you are a hero in his eyes you know... love to you
Karen
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Thank you Karen for always reading my work, I hope you are well, and I hope you had a wonderful Christmas and I wish you a great year to come
-Layne
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so touching
and sad. I know it can't be easy dealing with that scenerio, but keep your head up and the pain should be a little less each day! stay strong my friend. good write by the way!
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this is a sad, but good write. I know it must be hard to deal with that type of situation. i hope that its gets a little better for you as time goes on. Thanks for sharing your feelings with us.
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OMG!!! Touching and I felt I was right beside you in the kitchen... I then saw myself in my house with Kayla.. Just looking at that empty seat that I won't let anyone else sit in.. Different situations but sooo the same.... Sincere and Real!!! Reality!! Life! Loss! and Sorrow! Nessa
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