He could have walked,
trailed in wake of tornado,
that split his priorities
but chose another path,
one where the horizon
was not obscure, where sun
shone through veil of trepidation..
..even if only briefly.
She labelled him, left him
Boxed, marked as “White Elephant”,
never realising he was already used
and no amount of fresh words
could bring back newness.
He may hold love’s hand,
but it is never embraced,
the only trembling done is in
fear to feel,
fear that connections will
only drain away what little is left
and no matter what is lost,
amputation is the cure.
So stick your sign of fool
across a page or two,
for he would rather die an idiot,
than suffocate in knowledge.
Author notes
Option 1; Titles
A contest entry
- options by burdenbytruth.
600 points, ended January 23, 2008, 26 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Just Don't Ask .. Silence Often Offends
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This was cool, very unique. I like how the title isn't incorportated into the poem in any way. That gives it character. You used good vocabulary, "trepidation", I love that word! The last two lines are very powerful and drive the message into the heart of the reader. I like this a lot.
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powerful and beautiful done as always, Bro
Lynda
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wow..powerful
what a tangle of emotion explanation..this is amazing and your ending cinches it all together..wow..rather die and idiot..people live their lives everyday as idiots..but hopefully gain some sort of insight through mistakes..and thus redeem themselves..this one is so fearful of life that in your words "amputation is the cure..well thought out..well penned..thanx for sharing and best of luck in the contest..this one gets 5 *****'s from me and of course 3 clappies
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I really enjoyed this wonderful piece of work my dear. The last two lines summed it up quite nicely. Your work always shines to say the least!!! Love you, Cathy
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incredible
you have an incredible talent and this poem definetly shows it! i love this it keeps me intrigued the whole time and is just absolutley briliant good luck in the contest and i think this line
"for he would rather die an idiot,
than suffocate in knowledge."
ties the whole thing together just perfectley
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