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The change must always come from within



I could let myself
get caught in a tide
or allow my body to be blown-

across angry oceans
in nasty weather- on a matchstick sailing
boat---

should I seek the sun
or sit and wait until dawn
in the fields as a grouse faced
ewe

do I shoot the moon
or fire a gun
into deep, dark, wizened
woods

should I pick the fruit
or click my feet
to the sound of a pig - skin
drum

do I cut the grass
(and all that weed)-
or simply watch my garden
grow?

I could let myself
get caught in a tide
or allow my body to be blown-

across angry oceans- in nasty weather
on a matchstick sailing
boat...

but I won't.


Author notes

Floorboards. Listening to Johnny Cash inspired me to write this, very inspirational, no particular song, just his style. Please comment, it costs a fortune to promote poems these days. If you think it's bollocks, tell me, if you don't understand something ask me, cheers.

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  • sussac coir
    November 11
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    Hi I understand it clearly, well i think i do is it that only you can change the way you are or feel, if we have a problem we can speak to many people for reasurance and the feedback will always differ, but ultimatley its us that has to make the final decision, and that should come from within, i always go with what my heart tells me, hope i am right, yes its great and me to love johnny cash, pat yourself on the back its a lovely poem.

    Regards Sussac coi


  • Pollyanna
    April 22

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    Barter harder - I will

    across angry oceans- in nasty weather
    on a matchstick sailing
    boat...-Hey! Yer see that?

    Yeah, fookin' brill!

    I was about to fall asleep, but not now, yer get me Jou all busied up.

    Thanks

    Hehe

    When I first clicked on the verse and the page open, I get near giddy cos it was a bit longer than what I've been readin'.
    Yer shorts are amazing to, don' get me wrong, I am juss more blah, blah, more.
    As yer probably aware by now. Hehe
    This was indeed dfferent from what I'd expect from yer, and that is exactly what I expect from -the unexpected.
    So I expected this unexpectantcy, I juss wasn't expectin' it.

    Yer know?

    Damn Alex, I'll tell yer what...
    Whew!
    It's none too oft' that I find meself thinkin', 'Damn, why didn't I write that line'
    Perhaps yer'd like to barter fer it?
    Lemme know if this is somethin' yer might take interest in.

    across angry oceans- in nasty weather
    on a matchstick sailing
    boat...

    but I won't. -- I'm tellin' yer...It's juss not fair, that should've been my line.

    *Sighs

    What?
    Okay, I'm leavin'....
    Damn
    Juss give me a sec will yer?

    Hehe

    Bloody great verse Alex!

    Aye, well done indeed.

    Keep or if yer feelin' charitable, give (hint-- hint) well

    'Anna




  • Electric Sunrise gold member
    April 2
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    Thanks for the entry here, apologies regarding the delay on the judgement


    Good read, shame the grammer's lacking, otherwise it could and would be a fantastic poem, it's soft and nicely paced and an enjoyable read, but just needs that something to bring it up a level


  • Cynthia Gaines gold member
    September 11, 2008

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    Thank you for your entry in my contest, RE; Theme of Career Inspiration. I was a bit surprised to read what you submitted here. Your poem, "The change must always come from within" is a great piece in its own way, however, this isn't what I'm looking for. The only inspiration I found is in its title... Instead, the feeling I got after reading this piece was one of doubt, confusion, and anxiety; seeing the dark choices in life one must sometimes make; one bad choice over another bad one does not exactly inspire my muse here... Although it is a bit amusing, I was also put off by the number of contests this poem is already entered in. Please read my contest's overview, and once again, thank you for your time. Peace, Cyn


  • Silver Asylum
    September 10, 2008
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    Sorry

    This poem didn't match what I'm looking for in the contest, the contest is for being inspired by songs. So unfortunately I had to disqualify you, but I wish you luck in your other contests, I see you've already been awarded in a few. Great write though
    ~*~Zenity


  • G-y-p-o
    September 3, 2008

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    Well i was a bit put off by the amount of contests you have entered this poem into. Only because i think its fair to give all poems a chance because there all wonderful. Apart from that, a brilliant write!


  • skitza
    September 3, 2008

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    'do I cut the grass
    (and all that weed)-
    or simply watch my garden
    grow?

    I could let myself
    get caught in a tide
    or allow my body to be blown-

    across angry oceans- in nasty weather
    on a matchstick sailing
    boat...

    but I won't.'
    I liked this part mostly. I thought the ending was good. And I found it a bit funny, whether or not I should have done I don't know.
    I don't think this poem will be winning, however, as it has been entered into about a hundred contest, and won a few trophies. I don't think you need it, if you know what I mean.

    Thanks for entering.
    skitza


  • DarknessOfSanity
    August 27, 2008
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    kudos

    i loved this! it was well done and had a nice flow. thanks for the entry and good luck!


  • daviscth silver member
    July 14, 2008

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    It's nice to meet another Johnny Cash fan. I enjoyed reading this. I think the imagery is wonderfully done. Thanks for your entry.


  • Dreamana
    June 26, 2008
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    Sorry, the line limit was 20, so I have to DQ. Thanks for entering anyway.

  • the evil angel
    May 6, 2008

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    I love that he inspired you, and I completely support that. I don't listen to Johnny Cash usually, so i have no clue whether or not this is a rewrite of one of his songs. If it is,I would encourage you to enter completely original work in the future. If it is not, then I am impressed by your ability. I think some of the stanzas are ended kind of awkwardly, but in general it is very deep and thoughtful. Well done


  • Topaze gold member
    May 6, 2008
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    A very nice piece, with nice description and meaning. My best wishes in the contest.


  • Loveandblessings2u gold member
    April 21, 2008
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    Looks like you entered this into every contest there is LoL.

    "I could let myself
    get caught in a tide
    or allow my body to be blown-

    across angry oceans- in nasty weather
    on a matchstick sailing
    boat...

    but I won't "

    WoW the is an powerful ending.
    great job.

    Loveandblessings2u & yours always
    Joyce

    good luck in my contest.


  • animated lies
    April 15, 2008

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    Interesting. You've entered this in a lot of contests. It raises a lot of questions for the reader to ponder about after they are through. Thank you for entering my contest and good luck.

    animated


  • Glasyalabolas
    April 10, 2008

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    Very lyrical questioning in this piece with a strong ending. Says a lot but is very uncluttered.

    Good write.


  • BluesMan gold member
    April 5, 2008
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    Your metaphors really caught me off guard quite an interesting write Brilliant

  • Loveandblessings2u gold member
    April 5, 2008

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    WoW you sure entered this in a lot of contest.
    I was read this because it's apart of the contest I was in that we're to help pick the ender. The title of this piece pulled me in. This is a really good write, I enjoyed reading this and I wish you lots of luck in all the contest. I think you should win something for every contest you entered this into.

    loveandblessings2u & yours always
    Joyce


  • secberm
    April 5, 2008
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    Excellent.


  • Bazza
    April 4, 2008
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    We have a saying in Oz "up the creek in a barbed wire canoe" but this amazing poem of vasilation is so unusual that it is brilliant in its' conception but is finished with a resounding statement that ends all the conjecture of what could be and maybe. Unusual and original and yet extremely simple.
    Bazza


  • Bazza
    April 4, 2008
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    Some original and vivid visions fleet past the reader and end up with a good moral lesson


  • SilencefillsMySoul
    April 4, 2008
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    what imagery! What fantastic taste in word choice! thanks for sharing!


  • RedwingSpirit silver member
    March 26, 2008

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    This is pretty dang good i love the matchstick sailing boat part and the do i cut the grass the best. Nice poem Good luck with it here


  • daviscth silver member
    March 4, 2008
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    Loved this...


  • Randomly Beautiful
    March 2, 2008
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    Thanks:f

  • BlankSillhouette
    February 29, 2008

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    this is a very amazing piece. It sounds exactly as you explained, and often as johnny cash would; Simple and meaningful. Thank you for this beautiful piece of poetry and best of luck.

  • Starz of Heaven gold member
    February 29, 2008

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    This is a great piece that you have here thank you for taking the time to enter this contest have a very nice day be well


  • BuriedTreasures silver member
    February 28, 2008
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    Excellent--Well written & Versed--Best of luck in the contest!!


  • Pandorea
    February 13, 2008

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    love it! beautiful style...so lyrical. absolutley gorgeous!

    "do I cut the grass
    (and all that weed)-
    or just simply watch my garden
    grow?"

    that has to be my favourite bit.


  • leander Moderators member
    February 9, 2008

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    First of all: I have never thought that someone would be able to use the word "ewe" in such a gracious way like you did here

    I also like the metaphors and off course, the imagery that comes with them in this write

    Change from the inside can be good, but bad as well. It depends on how you're planning to change yourself

    Anyway, shoving this to the preliminaries
    Thanks for the entry!
    Leander


  • im not broken
    February 8, 2008
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    Good write!

    I really like this, it was very well written! The flow is good and the piece it self is is engaging. Good write and good luck!

    Sincerly,
    Em


  • Metaphorist
    February 7, 2008
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    Hmm, I thought this looked familiar. My comment is all the way down below. Still love it. Thanks for entering.


  • aboomer silver member
    February 7, 2008

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    wow - I love it. I'm sure I can't say anything that hasn't already been said on this, but I love the images of the frail human on a matchstick sailing boat in the vast ocean of life...but still having the control to 'cast his fate', so to speak.
    Love it!


  • love my jose luis
    February 6, 2008

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    I like this poem because it shows the power of the strength that anyone can have if they believe in themselves. Great poem here and good luck in your contest.
    ~Maria


  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    February 4, 2008

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    Thanks again for this entry... I wanted to leave another comment to let you know again how much this poem really spoke to me... it spoke volumes!!!

    I could let myself
    get caught in a tide
    or allow my body to be blown-

    across angry oceans- in nasty weather
    on a matchstick sailing
    boat...

    but I won't.


    I have allowed that to happen to me so many times!!!!  And I just love the strength of the final words simply stating "but I won't".... You have really inspired me to say 'I won't' to anything that comes along to take me down a path that is not right for me!  Thanks so much for this entry and congrats on the bronze!!


  • N e a r
    February 3, 2008

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    I was expecting you to say "I won't" in the beginning after the first part, but you kept on going, drawing me in more and more. I was hooked the whole time! I love this poem! This is veru inspirational, and it gives me hope for all my troubles. It gives me strength.
    EXTRAORDINARY poem! I enjoyed the read!

    Thanks for sharing & entering my contest A N Y T H I N G ~ G O E S ! Good luck!

    M a r l u x i a

  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    February 2, 2008
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    That spoke strongly to me of making choices that are good for ourselves and not allowing ourselves to be taken along a path that is not right for us!

    Showed strength of character too in not allowing things to do this!

    Definitely made me think about what choices I need to make in my own life and what I should not allow to affect me!
    Thanks!


  • PrInCeSsOfRoCk gold member
    February 2, 2008

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    i really enjoyed it! thought it was a great poem! specially liked the way you ended it...loved the ending. really well done and thank you for entering this


  • Repetitious Chaos
    January 31, 2008
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    This is wonderfully written, Dear Poet.
    Well done!


  • Sandygram
    January 19, 2008

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    You have penned another excellent write my friend. Bravo!!!! Your words were as always, Stunning!!! The message was spot on. Change can only come from within. We think and feel with our mind and heart. Whatever is within both is how others will feel about you no matter what one looks like. Great Write. Have a blessed weekend. Hugs and smiles dear friend. Sandy

  • we lit a flame
    January 18, 2008

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    I do like this poem. It's quirky and curious- simple and rhythmic. I like how you wrapped it all up in the end however it's not quite what I was looking for in this contest. Still a nice write- don't give up on it!


  • lindaburns gold member
    January 18, 2008
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    DQ'd

    DQ'd because it already has trophies. Congratulations.


  • TizMoi
    January 17, 2008

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    Hey Alex, loved this, Gosh its deep!!!! Fantastic imagery. Your so right about the changes having to come from within. Good luck in the contest - my first read on AP in a long time.


  • LadyUnique silver member
    January 16, 2008

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    i really like this it's going in the finalist's list. i have many more entries yet to read and I hope this survives
    thank you for entering and best of luck


  • Naridill gold member
    January 13, 2008

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    Not sure about this one - its worded beautifully. The imagery is strong but it seems lacking or too filled with emotions. Gripping though and inspiring. Love the ending.

    Thanks for entering.


  • Melodies
    January 11, 2008

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    Ha! So cool and wildly mad. I am so impressed by this poem… made me really appreciate your talent. The imagery here is so fine! A poem that makes the reader think and admire.


  • Inside and out
    January 11, 2008

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    Alex, you always cease to amaze me. I love your poems for their originality, creativity and imagery. I find it quite easy to get lost in the scene that you have created. This poem is quite fitting for how I am feeling lately. Well done my friend. Good luck in the contest.

  • Nighttime angel
    January 11, 2008
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    ahh the clappys are here for you.

  • Nighttime angel
    January 11, 2008

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    as I read this poem, I found that I could relate to a lot of it. there are many questions throughout this and they may take some time to figure out the answers. I love the title for this poem.. you are absolutely right the changes must come within ourselves. others can't change us or vice versus.. excellent job on writing this.

    good luck in the contest.

    kat


  • Lola Green
    January 11, 2008

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    very deep!! so many questions and so many things we need to figure out. I hope you keep your feet firmly on the ground and let your heart soar! thanks for your entry


  • creationsfromheart
    January 8, 2008

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    I enjoyed this read until i got to the end and read . but I wont... I think it would of been better without your answer


  • Deezee
    January 8, 2008

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    I like it but I realllyyyy would appreciate it if you fixed up but making every I and evry first letter of each phrase start with a Capitale. Message me if you do it.

  • magneticblue
    January 8, 2008

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    Poetic (which is surprisingly rare on allpoetry) and very interesting. Both peaceful and stirring, and your metaphor was pleasant to analyze. Good write.


  • Angel of Mercy
    January 8, 2008

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    it is an interesting metaphoric poem. Do you follow as to what society sees for you or follow your own path? Conform the mold made for you or break free? That's what I see in this one. I do appreciate how the narrator says i could but I won't.

  • Metaphorist
    January 8, 2008

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    Loved this because changing from the inside out is my year's resolution. The title and opening lines are especially profound. Thanks for sharing!


  • Animarising
    January 8, 2008
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    Hi, yes I like this, it ha s agreat structure and kept my attention right through. Well done.


  • Barb Davidson silver member
    January 8, 2008

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    Very interesting

    I like the way this piece turned my train of though off in another direction. It very nearly drags you along in places and then puts the skids on.

    If you want a few points ask, i have 3000 odd if you would liek some


  • vampiricarrot
    January 8, 2008

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    wow!!
    i'd applaud you, but i have no pointy credity things
    so i'll give you a mental one
    woop woop woop
    =)


  • cvillelisa
    January 8, 2008

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    I love the title so I had to click. Not a bad little poem really (I know I sound surprised but I clicked a few yesterday in the Feature Box and it wasn't a good thing). It has a definite rhythm and good sounds.




    but I won't

    as the change must always come
    from within.

    this last part you could cut. and leave the choice open and leave the reader on that pretty little image of a big ocean and matchstick boat. Just a thought.

    good luck in all the contests.

    Lisa


  • VirginiaDarling
    January 8, 2008

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    I think this write sounded quite good. I really like the last two lines, I think those were the best out of the whole poem. Keep up the good work.


  • Anguas-Confusion gold member
    January 8, 2008

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    "as the change must always come
    from within."
    Those two lines have to be my favourite from your poem. Thank you everso much for entering I really did enjoy reading it. The best of luck to you. xXx


  • Abe 1
    January 8, 2008
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    Brilliant thanx 4 the entry
    abe


  • Congruence
    January 8, 2008

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    I thouhgt it was goos - if you want me to be critical - the early parts lacked the skill and feel of the later parts, also the title, labours the point and gives the game away.

    Apart from that I thought this was an excellent piece, I really liked it. As I said, picks up as the piece progresses.


  • lostfromwithin
    January 8, 2008

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    This is very nice, I like that you can see that the change must come from within, It's so true. Just look at my name and you'll understand. It's easier said than done though, I've been trying to do it for years.

  • RedwingSpirit silver member
    January 7, 2008
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    This is very nice
    Thank you for entering this into my contest I wish you the best of luck

    Redwing Spirit

  • juno0404
    January 7, 2008

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    "but I won't

    as the change must always come
    from within."

    After all of the questions I love the option you chose.
    This is indeed a very beautiful write filled with imagery, and it flows smoothly through my mind.



  • Tam
    January 7, 2008

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    ummm...damn...

    I accidentally clicked on this feature...I'm an idiot...so I read your poem to be polite...LOL!
    but damn...this is EXCELLENT poetry...
    I'm so glad I fell into this wonderful write...
    this is deep...and insightful penning...
    love the imagery...but your ending is superb!
    great job!
    thank you for placing this as a feature!
    Blessings! Tammy


  • HeavenonEarth
    January 7, 2008

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    I have to come back to give this justice.
    Until then.... well, you know


  • Poetdontknowit
    January 7, 2008

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    NICE

    I find this to be a superb write. I think your boat is actually sailing around in my head. Your feelings are sooooooo familiar to my poetic brain. Maybe we are twins? hee hee Fine piece you have penned here!
    POETDONTKNOWIT


  • lurcher
    January 7, 2008

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    Seing you arsked me to coment so i will do that. I thort this waqs a good one and i liked it a lot and ill put you on to my favoirtes/.

  • Sandygram
    January 7, 2008
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    A wonderful poem you have penned Alex. You always have such great imagery in your poetry. Thanks for the great read this morning. It was a pleasure. Best of luck dear friend. I hope all is going well so far this new year. Bless you and your family. Take care, Sandy


    • Floorboards
      January 7, 2008
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      Aw, thank you Sandy! , things are good ta, hope you are too my dear friend,
      take care,
      Alex.

  • LlamaLord
    January 6, 2008

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    mmmmm

    its a really good poem... a great message, and you give some really great examples, using great metaphors, and using good parallelism (i personally love parallelism)

    but for some reason i feel that this poem could have been slightly better crafted...

    these two stanzas-

    "do I shoot the moon
    or fire a gun
    into deep, dark, wizened
    woods

    should I pick the fruit
    or click my feet
    to the sound of a pig - skin
    drum"

    These don't really show the theme that you have throughout the entire poem of either act or be "blown"... while they do show that you have options in life and can make descisons, neither on shows a passive action such as "wait till dawn" or "watch my garden grow" where you show first the action of making a change and then show the opposite where you do nothing and you just sit and watch. Not sure how you could improve this poem, maybe by using different examples? Ones where you can show the active and passive choices? But then again that is just another choice whether you want to change it or just leave it be!

    Anywho, it was a pretty good poem.


  • Disturbed Prodigy
    January 6, 2008

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    this is amazing, i like the message of it, you did a fantastic job on this, good luck in the contest, and keep it flowing

  • ErroneousSage
    January 6, 2008
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    Good Write

    Good Thoughts. Wise words.


  • Cherokee
    January 5, 2008

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    I really like this. I happen to know who you are and yes... you are still one of my favorite poets... and people. I cheated and investigated and found out who you are because I am about to delete this contest. It's just not attracting much interest. You definitely would have won something so I'm going to send you a little treat.


  • raggyann
    January 5, 2008
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    i hope you win
    this was so honest
    with a great flow


  • Jalalbad gold member
    January 5, 2008
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    I hope you win gold for the truth you've written here.


  • Emile
    January 5, 2008

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    Very good

    Your poem falls within the category of whimsical, fanciful and imaginative; armed with an energy of its own that propels it into our sphere of reality. It allows time to lighten the mind and soul and just have some fun with words and thoughts without the weight of a mission statement getting in the way.


  • flowerystone0
    January 5, 2008
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    Theres something kind of soothing to this write. I like it.


  • Cannonsfire
    January 5, 2008

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    Very well constructed write with wonderful flow, I like the repetition it gives it symmetry, Love, C


  • ChiyoKaya
    January 5, 2008

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    This poem is rally great! I love the simple flow and the repitation of the the first verse, it adds depth and power to the overall poem and ties it all together in the end! Very well done!

  • meaningfull
    January 5, 2008

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    I really needed to read this at this time of my life!! Thankyou for sharing this with everyone!! You are so right about having to change from within!!


  • sarajaneUK
    January 5, 2008

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    Match stick sailing boats, this made me think how insignificant we all are in the big scheme of things. Nice work honey. Especially love the first verse xx

  • wordsmithiest
    January 5, 2008

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    I like the idea of a matchstick sailing boat. I also like your line breaks and stanza lengths and how the piece looks on the page


  • MichaelLeeSmyth
    January 5, 2008

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    took a minute

    I understand where you are coming from on this, making no choice at all is till making a choice. I would ask you this, while change always comes from within could not also many of the things that you could do help towards the self-realization needed to make the change? I could let...to have any of these things happen all relate to choices made. I liked most of it, what is meant, however by as a grouse faced ewe. Lost me there.


  • sheltered
    January 5, 2008
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    excellent

    so nice to see you writing again and with style


  • kvwriter silver member
    January 5, 2008

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    Nice. Good rhythm--such that I could dance too. And, the message? Yes. We do have choices, more choices than we realize. Change is a choice that does come from within. Best to you in the contest!--Kel

  • Rosanine
    January 5, 2008

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    'bleating sheep' simile and the 4th stanza didn't work for me - imagery felt a little over-used and too familiar, but rest was a really good read thanks! Liked the intonation of this piece a great deal, the enjambement seeming to flow but then abrupt when you last expect it 'boat - but I won't'. Don't know if it needed the full 'moral' as the last 2 lines - maybe elipsis would have reminded us of where you wanted us to sail to. Again - thanks


  • Anna Emkah
    January 5, 2008

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    Very well said... you can change everything on the outside, but what matters is what is inside a person: his thoughs and his feelings. Well done.
    Anna.


  • The Nose
    January 5, 2008
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    I really like the theme of the poem! good work!

  • Araya Sunshine
    January 5, 2008
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    Nice. Made me think of that Micheal Jackson song, the man in the mirror.


  • HangingSoul
    January 5, 2008

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    wow....this was an amazing piece of work... i love the imagery... it kept the poem light despite the strong message that it carries.... i thought this was beautifully expressed and a very fell flowing piece of poetry

    good luck in the contest

    Pen on...
    VidZ


  • eleno
    January 5, 2008

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    i loved the various images,and i loved the last lines very true. thank you -elena

  • JustBreathe gold member
    January 4, 2008

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    "the change must always come
    from within"

    So true, true ... that's where it all begins. Good luck in the contest! ....JustBreathe


  • z etoile
    January 4, 2008

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    I have felt this before when staring at the waves, but it was the waves of Lake Erie and I now live by the ocean.
    I don't know sometimes don't you just feel all crazy like that?
    Who knows why


  • tarcus
    January 4, 2008
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    nice

  • resident-alien
    January 4, 2008

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    I liked the ending a lot
    And the entire poem has multiple inferences
    Smart move
    5/5 ^_^


  • lady8
    January 4, 2008
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    Much truth to the end,we are the one who make the choices.Wonderful read.


  • frownsnfreckles
    January 4, 2008
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    a nice contrast of images and choices, must agree with the conclusion. Enjoyed the flow of this

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