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Unity Among Trees

Come frosted pines
marching across mountaintops
showing no limits to glory

Your position is permanent
stationary in snowy ground
You remain together

Regardless of weather
unknown of circumstance
united with fellow trees

I gaze enviously
with a warm face
driven cold from icy air

But we are unstable
Our feet are not roots
Even if that is our desire

Oh, frosted pines
May you stand strong
May I someday stand like you

Author notes

I went skiing and there was a view of frosted pines....the rest sort of just came with the pen

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  • Labefaction
    February 1, 2008
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    Well, it is not exactly about willow trees, though I shall not remove it from the contest I am afraid that dampens your chances of winning

    But otherwise, I think it is a really good poem. For some reason the third stanza made me smile, about uniting with fellow trees. The whole poem makes me feel warm (thanks, it is really cold in my house.)

    • clichedriven
      February 1, 2008
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      Thanks

      Yeah I thought it would hurt my chances....but it does have tree in the title, which is legit....I suppose

      Thanks for not deleting it though!


  • SilverMoonFeathers
    January 3, 2008

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    Wow this is a descriptive poem. Great Job.. Definitely goes with the background.

    I think the strongest lines were

    "But we are unstable
    Our feet are not roots
    Even if that is our desire"

    -Silky