Do I need them to comfort me?
I use them tell they're dull.
Why do I have the abilitie to see,
The way into their soul?
I tease them only torturing them in the end,
Tearing their hearts away as I use them.
Why do I leave them to defend,
their hearts I already stole?
A contest entry
- Anything I can relate to by AngelSeeker.
1400 points, ended November 30, 2008, 23 entries
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Please help me with my writing.
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I think I understood what you were trying to say with this one, but I had to read it several times to figure it out. I’m not at all sure what the word defend means at the end of the second to last line. You also had what I can only assume is a typo (otherwise the second lie makes no sense) and a misspelled word:
I use them tell (till?) they're dull.
Why do I have the abilitie (ability?) to see,
What I got is that you use others until you grow bored with them but you have no intention of doing anything but play with their hearts and hurt them. I’m not sure how I’m supposed to relate to this when it’s something I would never do. Thank you for entering but this is not what I’m looking for.
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This is really good!!! Its awesome! Write more dang it!
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I added you to my favorites and for some reason it wont let me send you a message? but im just going to reply to stuff -
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Ya same here, and ok.
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No I haven't. I haven't gotten any ideas.
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Speechless!!!! You did an awesome job with this! Keep up the wonderful and amazing work and may God bless you always in everything you do and every thing you write. Keep it up my poetic friend.
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