If I could say the things I feel
Like secrets deep inside
I'd tell you of the love I have
The love I've had to hide
But now you're gone and I'm alone
Like so many time before
I always told you that I'd change
But now you know the score
The wheels of life turn one more time
Another broken heart
But I remember what we had
Before we had to part
But life goes on and I must keep
My secrets deep within
So hurry memories, leave me be
Because losers never win
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I'm not sure losers never win, just change games they play for their advantage. Secrets hidden loves feelings to remember being alone. Promised memories survive as life goes on. The flow is nicely done. Quatrain work well. Good luck with the contest.
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The thoughts of the person telling the story seem realistic and allows the reader to relate.
If we all loved ouselfs as much as we freely love others,Life wouldnt be so hard sometimes.
Lovely Write...Heartfelt.
Thank You for commenting on my entry
Good Luck with the contest
Angel
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very true
beautiful poem sis very moving
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beautiful poem, tender and sad...excellent flow, and loved the thoughts penned in this ~Blessings always~ ~Trisha~
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You know I'm enjoying reading your work. You have a natural ability for rhyme. Good job and your poems always tend to have a deeper element revolving around relationships and love.
~The Inc."
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Wonderful write. Reminds me of a country song by Rascal Flatts called Winner At A Losing Game. But anyways I loved this one. Very nicely done. Keep it up!
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I love it. I'd say that I can totaly relate but some words are only truely known to the one thats writen them. fantastic job.
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Honestly this is absolutely brilliant, awesome rhyming and rhythym, which i'm always a sucker for.. and wrapping up the title in the last verse is just awesome, makes the whole thing so complete, like you are really saying all you've got to say about that, and u said it well
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