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Cerebral Subversion

Born the core of depravity
a beast of ego dreams cruel thoughts
raised in a darkened cavity
awaiting its chance to escape

Reality's fabric loosens
as mindless demons awake
sanity begins to break
destroying preconceptions

Tranquility has ceased breath

and peace has met with foul death 

 

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Prompt ~Reality is the shell of insanity

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  • Anemone-Rose
    January 17, 2008
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    Speechless what a great poem, i really like the first part of it. but all in all an awesome write.


  • Poetdontknowit
    January 17, 2008

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    NICE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

    For sure, a write worth a golden trophy! Very awesomely done, vocabulary to die for. Keep it up, I dig your style!
    POETDONTKNOWIT


  • Devils Reject
    January 17, 2008

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    Congrats on the gold for this one. You deserved it, this piece is excellent. I especially liked this part:
    "Reality's fabric loosens
    as mindless demons awake
    sanity begins to break
    destroying preconceptions"



  • Pamela A Lamppa silver member
    January 4, 2008

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    Wow. This one hits hard. Great to see gold on this most creative piece. Well done with this. Ouch, it does have a bite! ~Pamela


  • x-Black-Butterfly-x gold member
    January 3, 2008
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    this is a creative and powerful piece which is beautifully penned. well done mark and congrats on the gold


  • x-Black-Butterfly-x gold member
    January 3, 2008

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    this is a creative and powerful piece which is beautifully penned. well done mark and congrats on the gold


  • ScarletO gold member
    January 2, 2008
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    Well done,,,congrats on the gold


  • penman gold member
    January 2, 2008
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    Excellent

    Very creative and well done. Best of luck in the contest.


  • Matt Holck
    January 2, 2008
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    rage was held to order
    'til we stopped having something(some one) to believe

  • Starz of Heaven gold member
    January 2, 2008

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    This is a great take on the prompt thank you for your entry goodluck to you in this contest best wishes and muh love

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