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Not Even Hot Chocolate

frozen in my tracks
a million shards of ice
dry pierce my lungs
as each breath is cut short
by the absurdness


of this cold country
which gave birth to me


my feet firmly fixed
as all neurons
fight a losing battle
on this frigid day
my now island thinned blood
crystallizes on impact
and I know that

not even

hot chocolate


will make me warm again
so the countdown begins
till I return to the land


    .... of sun... sea... and sand...

 

 

 

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  • grannyeri gold member
    January 12, 2008

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    Liked the alliteration and the vivid visuals throughout these lines. Easy to read and understand as well. Winter certainly is all this.


  • AJ Morelli gold member
    January 11, 2008
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    thanks so much for entering this in the contest, some nice imagery here...


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