Dear Me,
all these regrets in my life
not to mention those i don't remember
told myself it was right
but i knew i was lying that time
when i took that turn way to fast
showing off for you
the fourwheeler wasn't fixed, yes i really did know
the tree didn't move like it should've
it just stayed in my way
the bruise on my thight hurt like all heck
but i smiled and played brave
had i known you woulda felt so bad
i woulda thought it through
instead of fakin for you
do you she recall that fight we got into
way back in seventh grade
so many years ago, it shouldnt matter now
but it does, cause it caused the knife,
which led to drugs, and jail, not to mention him
we dont talk anymore, we aint friends anymore
like we were at the reform school
i went back, but she straightened out
finally i was noticed at school
the bad girl, who knew all the cops by first name
and could tell you where the best party will be
if i had known how mama would react
i never woulda threw that first punch
the time just last year
i let him walk away from me
not understanding why
i am fine with it now, we're cool
but dang i wish he knew
that i didn't mean what i did
or what i had said
if i had known i would the first
to make him cry,
i would have thought it through
and the other day, holdin my boys hand
walkin in the town
lookin at the sights and tourists
laughing at the little kids
rolling down the hill
and tryin it ourselves with the setting sun
i confessed all of my regrets
and he whispered in my ear
'don't be sorry, because of them
you are who you are
and i still love you'
Author notes
opt 8
A contest entry
- A letter of advice by Loveprevails.
380 points, ended January 10, 2008, 4 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - LOTS OF OPTIONS! by Shenanigans.
700 points, ended November 23, 2008, 37 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
what are you thinking?
Comments
-
WOW! I loved this. At first it seemed kind of disjointed, like little snapshots where I couldn't tell how many characters you were talking about, but then at the end it all makes sense. What an awesome poem about reflection and love...
The grammar was off, but it gives it its voice, I might take out the "she" in do you she recall, unless it's part of your dialect. Excellent work, and good luck in the contest.
--Shannon -
This is a great letter! I could tell you really took the time, and thought about the life changing events from your past that meant the most to you. That's exactly what I wanted this contest to be about, so bravo to you! The only concerns I have is the punctuation. I would go through and proof read, they're are a few lines that are missing small words.. example: If i had known i would the first to make him cry i would have thought it through....
I think your missing something there! lol
Thank you for entering and good luck
Adding your comment:
