blank skies of strikes
into a Deity roar
acres of chinchillas
ravish the feet
praising the god of charm
into claims of kindness
when they bow to him
he rumbles and quakes
into sweet fairy desire
let cupid change the being
into his kissing bow
then the god seeks his
mate of time course
knock knock let her
into the chalice of wine
he shall drink her fruit
when the fireworks of
thunder rages the announcement
into misty love
A contest entry
- Manifest Deities by lilacgold.
1050 points, ended February 20, 2008, 15 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
ruling
Comments
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Very intense, of that there is no doubt, but I must confess that the abstract nature of the imagery combined with the lack of punctuation makes it a little hard for me to understand. To me this poem rushes along through a strange landscape then comes to a stop. Still, I shall reread it and of course it will still be under consideration for the contest.
Best of luck!
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