Rippling blossoms, silken petals of remembrance
seen only by moonlight
Between this promise, night flowers . . .
as the light surrenders
Darkness crawls all around, an unhurried harbinger.
Day blinks, ne’er able
to keep the eventide held at bay
As my stream of consciousness folds,
a moment both dark and light
the veil of ignorance is lifted,
vision and perception merge
suspended in a tranquil calm . . .
a drifting requiem of repose.
Unaware and at peace in a riot of color,
submerged thoughts flow from the fount of sapience.
A seemingly meaningless vision
transformed into prediction.
You just close your eyes and for a moment dream
as echoes of sound still whisper in your mind,
like the sweet confectionary taste left behind from wine
seen only by moonlight, dwelling in memories
these slivers of fortune are posed in anticipation and silence.
A vision so quite, it can only speak in our dreams
blooming beneath night, always promising to remember,
but darkly forgotten.
Author notes
Swim_Swim_by_Fealasy (pic credit-Devart)http://fealasy.deviantart.com/art/Swim-Swim-21752637
A contest entry
- Picture Inspired Contest (January) by Denierim.
1000 points, ended February 3, 2008, 26 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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I love and adore the imagery here; how you brought the scenes and colors to life with your beautiful words. I really really like this piece. The flow was excellent and the smoothness of your style gave it a dreamlike feeling. That's a very good thing in my books. Wonderful work with this one!
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beautiful
This was incredible.......it brought a sense of peacefullness over things, and the wording was genius! It really describes wonderfull things in the universe I suppose.......Brilliant!
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Most wine leaves a bitter and unusual after taste. But I don't think you're drinking Purple Passion here. Overall good write...but a bit vague.
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As sensitive as the changes you picture in such a plethora of beautifully chosen words, memorable. But do you mean quiet in the last verse?
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wonderful write here, well penned. you have some wonderful imagery here, nicely done
"at peace in a riot of color" beautiful line
keep up the good work!
Axel Gold
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I think you wrote what you say in the picture, but I think you need to use a thesaurus for some better descriptive words, overall it was good but try changing some of the words it might make it hit harder which I think you were going for.
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Wow...You did a really great job capturing the essence of the emotion in this picture.
"Unaware and at peace in a riot of color,
submerged thoughts flow from the fount of sapience"
-These eloquently written lines really stood out to me...making this piece as intricate and interesting as the picture itself. Nice Write
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