I know there’s something in your stare
As you sit there in your underwear.
You climb on me, in my chair.
Then you tease, everyway, everywhere.
I’m going crazy and you just begin.
I start to feel you brushing skin.
You gaze at me with that playful grin.
I’m thinking you're heaven and I want in.
As you move, you slowly help me undress.
Every impulse I try to suppress.
Our desires we softly confess.
Over your bare skin, my hands start to caress.
You dance over me, soft & slow.
Anticipation starts to steadily grow.
The wonders of your body you playful show.
On an exploration, my lips start to go.
I pick you up and lay you on the bed.
In just your gaze, so much is said.
As my lips travel, you start to spread.
In anticipation of what’s ahead.
You rub your hands down your breast.
Then softly kiss me on my chest.
“Make love to me,” you softly request.
Tonight, there will be no rest.
Author notes
Written: January 2, 2008
For contest "Kinky is the game:" Sexy enough?
For Contest "Make me see again" Option 4
In a list
- 3. Trophies-Bronze • next in list
- To Catherine • next in list
- 4. Trophies-Honorable Mention • next in list
- Erotic • next in list
A contest entry
- Give Me Your Best Adult 17+ by WillAlwaysLove.
600 points, ended January 7, 2008, 8 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - love: the kind you clean up with a mop and bucket by risewiththesmoke.
300 points, ended February 1, 2008, 14 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Enter All Your Love Writes Here! by xxRainbowDawnxx.
300 points, ended March 8, 2008, 306 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - strong feelings by Violent Glass.
425 points, ended March 3, 2008, 67 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - I Wanna Touch You All Over and Over and Over by Blooming Poet.
310 points, ended February 21, 2008, 10 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Make Me See Again by crystallynnbradford.
315 points, ended March 18, 2008, 17 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
Comments
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AWESOME!!!
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hmmm yeah two lovers in love as one craves the other with simple bliss you couldn't ask for more in this poem so sweet very passionate very lovely it was truly unique to read
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very good write. usually i wouldnt read poems like this bbut i really liked this one. subtle but to the point
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This is so erotic, it really turns me on. You've managed to make wonderful poetry from such a private moment, while making it sensual but tasteful at the same time. I would just urge you to watch your spelling, such as in this line: "I start to feel you brushing skin." Other than that though, I think you're really on to something here and I completely enjoyed this read. Bravo on penning such a great piece!
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OH WOW! Truly seductive... brilliant form and flow, I like your choice of smooth words, it leaves us all to wonder what comes next. Keep it up.
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Very good write. I loved this. It was artful, wonderful, and the imagery made me wish my love was here with me now. This was very well done, and the rhyme made me smile. Good job.
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So soft, and sensual. I love this, it's a terrific write!! My favorite part >
You rub your hands down your breast.
Then softly kiss me on my chest.
“Make love to me,” you softly request.
Tonight, there will be no rest.
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Believable erotica is very difficult to get right, but as you have already won quite a few trophies for this piece, I would presume that it's what people want to read. It's quite gentle and avoids all the usual clichés and vulgarity. The only small point I would make is that putting a full stop at the end of every line breaks the flow and rhythm, which isn't desirable either in poetry or love making!
Kat
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That is a amazing
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I really enjoyed reading this. I'm glad you won some trophies for this. My favorite part is: "I’m thinking you're heaven and I want in." That was a fantastic choice of words.
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this is tasteful, but a little plain for my taste. the rhyme is a little predictable.
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wow
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nice write, is there a part 2
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Thanks so much for posting in my contest.
Cathy
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This is a very nice poem and the graphic in the beginning helps you set the scene. I too liked the flow and rhyme. Thanks for entering and good luck.
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"your" to "you're"
This is intense and very tasteful. You did a great job with the rhyming structure, and I feel this was given much attention and carefulness when written. "Tonight, there will be no rest." : That explains a lot, just with this one line. Passion has filled this write to the brink.
Thanks for entering your write in "Enter All Your Love Writes Here!", and good luck!
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This is such a wonderful love poem. I enjoyed reading every word. You did a fantastic job with the imagery in this also.
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this is really good
i loved the visualization
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Wow, this is really great. Love the line "as my lips travel, you start to spread" Good luck in the contest.
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OW OW!
This is awesome. it wasn't "hard" kinky, it was delicate kinky. There were many lines that made me not want to stop reading. good luck!!!
xoxo
pixie -
This is nice and gently erotic, it makes me feel warm inside
You gaze at me with that playful grin.
I’m thinking your heaven and I want in.
Those lines CRACK ME UP! I shouldn't laugh, but it actually does make me laugh, it's quite a funny thing to say! Love it. -
"“Make love to me,” you softly request.
Tonight, there will be no rest."
i don't know if i would have requested it! you had a wonderful use of analogy, truly a sweetly provactive piece.
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ooooh very sexy lol
Very creative and interesting piece. I like the way you describe the sexual content of your poem, not dirty/pretty, which is always best. Thanks for entering my contest and best of luck to you!
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foreplay is kinda the art oof seduction and this poem said that so well. so sensual so beautiful. you penned a beautiful poem here
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I think that in your second line you should be your... that was the first thing I noticed when I was reading this poem... but after that you had a lot of stong wanting feelings and I liked that. I think that you did a good job on writing this piece... I think that the last line was a little forced for rhyme, maybe you could think about that. Other than that you have a good poem, obviously you have placed in 2 contests already with it... Thank you for your entry and good luck in my contest.
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this is very beautiful,really good.very tasteful
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i adore this, the rhyming is there, but it works, its not forced, and it says exactly what i want to say, and how im feeling right now. its beautiful in its simplicity, and i can feel the glowing of erotic love, thankyou so much for entering!
Bec
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very pleasing rhyme to this it's erotic without being vulgar. very smooth
thank you for your entry and best of luck
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You know this is good, thanks for sharing. Good luck.
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Great poem. Perfect rhyme. Amazing, very erotic and sexy. I loved it, great job. I seriously loved the rhyme and the flow was great. Thank you for entering and good luck.
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excellent
I love everything about this piece. It has just the right amount of sizzle and as I read it I actually felt the words. Please write more!
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Very sexy and seductive
With just the right amount of foreplay, a night of awesome passion may enfold
Much enjoyed!
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very well done. I like the descriptions used in this piece. I like the first stanza in this.
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