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I Wish Upon a Star

I look to the midnight sky and stare at the stars.

Dancing and glistening in a place so seemingly far.

Thoughts consume my every wish.

Thoughts I love you and everything that I miss.

I miss your smile and your beautiful face.

I miss the way you held me in your loving embrace.

I miss those long summer walks.

I miss those long evening talks.

I miss the dreams we so desperately shared.

I miss the compassion and the way that you cared.

I miss the way you looked at me.

I miss the day you set me free.

Now I wish upon a star.

Dancing and glistening so seemingly far.

I wish you happiness in everything that you do.

For it wasn't your heart that left mine.

It was mine that left you.

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Things we lost in the fire
OPTION # 4
OPTION # 3....SOMEONE I LOST

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  • steal-my-scene
    May 15, 2008

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    This is a beautiful write. I especially like the last 3 lines but all of it is written well. Good Luck.


  • Dragonheart1 gold member
    May 15, 2008

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    Wihsing upomn a star can bring you more dreams of this same type..However I like the part.., wishing you happiness. It shows you still care about them.

    Return the favor/


  • BuriedTreasures silver member
    May 15, 2008

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    Congratulations on the bronze award as well as all the other awards this composition has earned!!
    Well Done!!


  • Dark Angel Reborn
    May 12, 2008

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    I'm not a big fan of poems with a rhyme scheme, but I really like this. Its so sweet and innocent, and I can really connect. You've done an amazing job with this work and you really expressed a lot of emotion and heart ache with this...great job.


  • MalevolentDesire
    April 29, 2008

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    This is an amazing piece. It struck deep in my core, and made me think of my own girlfriend, and how much I miss her when we're apart.

    You have done a great job, and I truly think that you've expressed emotion and love with this in a great way.

    Thank you for entering, and I wish you luck.


  • Blooming Poet
    April 4, 2008

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    ahh such a sweet poem. for sure worthy of the 2 golds it has recived. amaizng emotion is penned here. yor muse was really working


  • Melissa Burns
    March 21, 2008
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    THANK YOU for entering - this is a very good read and write, welcome to the finalist list


  • Wolf Run0
    February 29, 2008

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    It doesn't sound like you left anyone, if you still look at the stars and wish for their happiness.
    Amazing write. (and kudos for rhyming!) Thanks for the entry, and I love the picture. Best of luck in the contest, and God Bless!
    -Vivian


  • Amunet Wolfbane Moderators member
    February 23, 2008
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    This is very lovely and somehow very familiar. Perhpas I've read it before. Hmm, nice job.


  • darkangelcutter
    February 19, 2008
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    hey this is good i liked how you used the stars as your guide good luck
    shannon


  • Suna Ketsuma
    February 15, 2008

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    that was amazing, and i love your picture by the way. I hope you continue writing and i wish you the best of luck in my contest!


  • xxRainbowDawnxx
    February 14, 2008

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    I just love the idea that Steven thinks these things about me when he lays in bed or looks up at the stars. Oh, I hope so, he makes me smile and he's so sweet to me. You sound very similar.


  • Jade-
    February 12, 2008

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    Awwww, wow -- amazing poem!!! It's soo emotional, and has some great imagery, and rhythm.

    Thanks for entering, and best of luck!

    [x] [x] [x]


  • SatanicTemptation09
    February 10, 2008

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    Wonderful write, although I was looking for someone who had left you but then again, leaving someone can be painful all on its own. When reading this I remembered my love whom I lost to death. This was compassionate and the "I miss" repitions only enhanced this poem. The flow was great as was the wording.

    I especially liked:
    Thoughts consume my every wish.
    Thoughts I love you and everything that I miss.

    Thank you for entering


  • Sle3p
    February 10, 2008

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    very good I have to agree this is very imaginary...and i loved reading it...thank you for entering my contest; i wish you good luck

    Fluffy


  • Jai Guru Deva
    January 26, 2008
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    I love the imagery in this. Good job and good luck.


  • Atrophya
    January 19, 2008
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    we always lose something at some point or another..

    Rain--x


  • Angierie
    January 16, 2008

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    Amazing job! and I love the background and pic.. (I'm a sucker for all things yellow

    Thanks so much for entering!!!
    Angie


  • Bas
    January 5, 2008

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    Beautiful

    believe it or not i was just thinking of a old song called wishing on a star by rose royce then i seen your poem , i really like the words you have penned here , i can feel the love and the loss the compassion and the caring you have once felt , the long summer walks and the long summer talks , i guess the hardest part is being set free but sometimes its just meant to be , i feel that this has came straight from your heart and spirit and thanks for sharing this with me


  • raggyann
    January 2, 2008
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    wow this was an amazing write
    your passion and compassion shines in your words

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