As I gaze into your eyes I can see a sparkling shine.
Dancing to the melody of a love songs chime.
Eyes so beautiful with a glistening dance.
They capture my heart and put my soul in a trance.
They call for me to kiss your soft, sweet lips.
To stroke your smooth skin with my fingertips.
My heart is pulsing with a loves desire.
To ignite a flame of romance and start a passions fire.
My spine tingles with ecstasy just from the look in your eyes.
They cause my soul to release a thousand, white doves into the blue filled skies.
I'm taking this moment to express how I feel.
To tell you I love you and I know that it's real.
You don't need to say a word.
You don't need to say a thing.
Your eyes tell me you love me.
And so I offer you this ring.
Author notes
option # 3...love
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A contest entry
- PRE WRITES WITHOUT TROPHIES ONLY by lindaburns.
1050 points, ended January 21, 2008, 29 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Calling all Romeos and Juliets by PonyPride.
425 points, ended January 23, 2008, 11 entries
Gold trophy winner
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600 points, ended March 12, 2008, 13 entries
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750 points, ended March 24, 2008, 24 entries
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Comments
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a very beautiful poem of love and care, and im happy for you that you have the one you love by your side, it must be a wonderful feeling, this poem was full of happiness, this really made my day thank you!
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Very emotional. I love it. All about what I wanted. Thank you for entering and good luck.
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Nice
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Thank you for your beautiful entry, good luck, Josie
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Thank you for your beautiful entry, good luck, Josie
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Just lovely and the picture adds such a personal touch to the words. You have rhymed well once again and it is so nice to see these feelings for your loved one...alby
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Awww this was such a beautiful piece...one that makes your heart melt. Thank you for entering my contest and best of luck,
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Bravo bravo.. this was so sweet. and the eomtion in your words was just so beautiful.. great write..
Peace to you, Jetleena
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This was incredibly sweet! I loved the flow and every line was...uh...I don't know how to put it into words. (I blame the fact that I'm tired...) Well, good job, good luck in the contest(s), and thanks for entering!
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How sweetly your words flowed throughout this, it must have just melted her heart. In some places the meter was a little longer than others but it still flowed quite well. Thanks for your entry
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Aww
What a sweet and romantic poem! I really loved the flow of it, and how honest it is. Not to mention the pic, of course.
I did have a problem with the fact that you didn't carry the ryme all the way to the end, but that does not take much from it, so it is no wonder that you won.
Congrates
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brilliant poem
faultlessly crafted, loved the photo and border. the poem rhymes superbly and is perfect, well done -
wow. Great entry as always. You really can write love poems. Very beautiful
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You have definately managed to express your feelings very clearly within the lines of this poem.
The write itself is maybe a little bit cliché, but when words come from the heart it doesn't really make a matter then.
The rhymescheme you have used here is flawless, although the flow of the poem is a bit wobbly here and there.
Thank you for taking the time to enter this contest, I wish you the best of luck!
Leander -
This was very lovely. Thank you for entering and sharing your love with me
"Eyes so beautiful with a glistening dance.
They capture my heart and put my soul in a trance.
They call for me to kiss your soft, sweet lips." -
Your words show true compassion and an understanding of your lovers needs and your own and how truly special they are to you. She a lucky woman to have someone who will try and understand her no matter what.
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AMAZING!!! It's perfectly written. very descriptive and it's just beautiful. wow. thank you for entering.
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This is absolutely perfect! It is so
beautiful and romantic, and really sweet.
Your descriptiveness told us of the love
that you really feel. great job.
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Excellent
What an excellent composition--Sincere and beautiful to read---I wish you all the best and may your love grow in the coming years---AL -
Very lovely
I enjoyed how you described your feelings in detail.
Great job, good luck and thanks for entering.
Ephiphany♥ -
Sweet piece and nicely said. I did find that the spaces between the line made it a little difficult, but I think the sentiment is very sweet and the rhyming is nice too.
I do want to let you know though that I am adding a rule against having the word "I" in lower case, so please change this before judging comes around.
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Couplets are probably one of my all time favourite forms- and it lends itself nicely to love poems. This is lovely and heartfelt and it's sweet that you included a picture. Cheers for the entry.
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Beautiful
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Comment by Judge
Aww. How sweet and simple and nice. Just the sort of poem I especially like. Thank you for entering my contest.
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This is absolutely beautiful!! Love it...it flows so smoothly...Best of luck hun!!
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now i see this i wonder why i bothered
seriously good loving.
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oh this is so wonderful
your a romantic person
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